Absolutely incredible! One of the best fics I've ever read and its of my favorite pairing too!

This is great! Everyone was in-character, and you presented some unlikely ships that I may have to consider the possibilities of now. :p Great Chie/Yu here, and good to see another fan of the pairing. You captured her great, and your take on Yu is really likeable and smooth. Great work. :)

Yep, as was said, the only criticism possible for this really is it's hard to notice scene changes and the like. There are many different ways to do this as author, so it's up to you to figure out which you prefer. That being said...

OMG the cuteness of this fic(sorry Chie :p ) is just great. You do a really exceptional job of keeping most everyone in character, from a Rise who has lost the "race" to get with Yu winding up with Yosuke, which I greatly approve of(and was great seeing their interaction when it came to the dance itself), to a Naoto who breaks it down logically about which dress to pick for Chie. You do a really fantastic Naoto, and that scene was really perfect. She would be the one to perfectly understand Chie's thought process when it comes to the dress as well, as both of them have always been similar in that regard. If anything, it's my only regret about Persona 4, in that Naoto joins so late so doesn't have much interaction with the rest of the cast. The amazing thing with your writing in general though is you could probably have any character interact with anyone else and it would simply be a fun read. :)

And then of course that Chie/Yu interaction. Seen it before in your drabbles, said it before in your other story, but you really do capture the heart of what the relationship between these two can be. At Chie's core, she probably would be confused about how she even found herself in the situation where she was chosen, and probably wants to make sure it isn't simply because she's "cute," which makes her freaking out about the dress make all the more sense. Also got the sense that she grew as a person tremendously just to be able to say her thoughts out loud to the other girls. And then beyond this, she's probably the only one of the cast that could flat out surprise Yu that often. Sure, it was Naoto that figured out which one she should wear for that, but she was still the one that went for it.

Not going to lie. I've been anxiously awaiting whatever it was you were cooking up as you had mentioned something in your drabble, and this was certainly worth waiting for. :)

5.7/10