GOD I find one thing wrong in every chapter that drives my ocd crazy even though it is a good story. Anko Mitarashi not Mitarashi or whatever

Kyuubi not kyubia

Normally I try to avoid negative reviews be in this case this is kinda terrible. Fist it moves too quickly if you had gone slower it might have improved the story considerably and second way too many cliches and instant power ups.

I can handle most neglect fics, but the ones where the family magically just “realizes” what they did wrong, are just completely unbelievable. So far I can tell that you are a good author, but these kinds of stories are unbearable.

Still have quite a few spelling and grammatical errors.

Your fanfic makes me want to die

i feel insulted and yet flattered

Not read much but one mistake that I cannot ignore is kurama's tailed name. It's not kyubia it's kyuubi. Kyubia is not even a word. I hope that you make change to that because making a mistake in writing kyuubi will portrait you as an novice naruto author
Anyway Wayne out:)

I think you meant sister/father not brother/father

You need a beta. Badly. Good content at times but you either need someone to check over this or double check yourself

Alright, seriously? Really, grammar is bad, no character development, no relationship development and everything is happening way too fast. You pretty much left a 7 year gap in your story with all the time skips right out of the gate. The term "nine tails" by the way is pronounced Kyuubi, not kyubia I don't even think that's japanese. Honestly I'm cringing with every minute I read this fic. I don't want to sound needlessly harsh but unless you clean this mess of a fic up I do not plan to continue reading.

I hope you seriously consider taking my advice and doing some heavy editing of this fic because the only excuse for this big of a mess is amateur work or english isn't your first language.

It's not kyubia it's kyuubi

Fuck nardo and fuck harem loving shitheads like you. Gfkys.

Quotation marks "" are used around speech.

"I'm talking to you" Said naruto.

This is realllllly too close to canon.

And what is up with your quotations? I’m not understanding why you feel the need to write in such a distracting manner. It’s almost impossible to tell half the time when someone is speaking.

You’re forcing your readers to focus on the actual act of reading itself rather than allow them to just read and enjoy the story. It’s not very fun.