The basis of this story is amazing but you are missing way too many words and the sentence structuring is very choppy. Should you be able to refine those then this story will be excellent but until then im afraid it is simply an unreadable story. Now thats not to say that i dont get what's going on in the story, i understand the gist of what happens, however it takes far to long and is very annoying to have to place the words in the correct order, and even add or subtract words, in my head to make reading this entire story feasible.

Oooooo... And it gets interesting!

nice!

When Anakin tells Padme that he couldn't sleep for more than a few hours so he goes down and tinkers... Is it just me or is that quote from Iron Man 3? XD

I'm very much enjoying this series! You've addressed so many what-ifs and it's been such a pleasure reading about how you imagine things! Now I'm off to gobble up the rest of this :D

I've recently been reading a lot of star wars books taken place after return of the jedi. i'm in the middle of reading the last book on the black fleet crisis trilogy. I think Anakin would be a lot like leia was when luke asked to look into her mind and told her he got a lead on who their mother was.

Cannot wait for an update...awwww

...Ruwee's little speech is almost word for word from "The Prince & Me", the only changes as gender in boy/man into girl/woman and monarchy into Naberrie... might want to edit or add an acknowledgment on that...

This still is just leaving a sour taste in my mouth. Padme is off on her own agenda, with kidos this time... leaving Anakin even more isolated. She also very much treats him as an underling or even a child, then throws him the bone of some 'fun times' when he gets too discontented.

And now even more so... Padme, excuse me, *Amidala* really needs to learn how real marriage works and employ some of her diplomatic and negotiation skills to her own household. So far she's swanned back into her old life, pawning her kids off on her husband who's now trapped into a 1950's style housewife role.

On the one hand... this is nice and has a very grounded and real feel. On the other... it feels like Anakin is the only one doing any adjusting. It's all fine and dandy for him to observe some of Naboo's social norms, but why can't Padme make some exceptions on things like the light saber or not berating him for being late without giving him a chance to explain or not taking the side of the servants over her husband? If anyone feels like a 'pushover' in this story so far, it's Anakin...

Personally, I do believe that Plagueis was responsible for Anakin's birth, but not in the way he planned. I believe that, as a response to his experiments, the Force created Anakin to end Plagueis' experiments and his legacy.

Wait, what Jamillia scandal? So far as I can tell, she served her four years before she either left office voluntarily or was defeated in her reelection campaign.

I look forward to the sequel! Quick question if you could answer it. Will Ahsoka make an appearance in the sequel?

nice...please do tell when you've posted "Renaissance" already :)

Don't kill boba and plz no redirected palpatine coming back and still causing he crap he did the first time. If he comes back he should just get killed real quickly. But overall don't kill boba, maybe anakin could help him face his demons?