This is really great! You've done a good job with the action, the characterization, etc. I'm looking forward to more!

This story is really good so far. The characters are well written and in-character and the way you write is smooth in a way that almost everything ends up relating or leading to other things.
I really like this story and I hope you continue writing.
Keep up the good work!

This is really interesting! I'm reminded a lot of early Sailor Moon episodes where the villains would use fads as their latest schemes (Im not sure if that was your intention but its always nice when Boueibu evokes old Magical Girl shows nostalgia!)

I also love the writing style! You set the scenes so nicely!