HOW DARE YOU CALL YOUR WRITING BAD! I'M OF THE FIRM OPINION YOU ARE ACTUALLY J.K. IN DISGUISE, HOW DARE YOU!

I sympathize with the end bit, about babies and their transforming-brains-into-mush weird superpowers.

THIS IS EVERYTHING I'VE EVER WANTED IN LIFE TYSM

One portkey, more than one portkeys.
I feel apprehensive on Daphne and Astoria Greengrass’ behalf that they now attending Durmstrang.

I’m already sick of Mad-Eye’s attitude towards Remus Lupin. People’s helpful attitudes aren’t synonymous with treating you like an invalid. They behave that way towards you because they care.

Yay! You go, Cyrene! aty having killed Daphne's abusive son of a bitch of a father.

I’d have become (or seriously considered becoming) a vegetarian too if my bacon turned into piglets who ran away from my plate squealing in terror.
“reinforcement”, not “re-enforcement”.

Yay! for Remus agreeing to include the others in the training.
The mental pic of those expressions of mute horror on the faces of Ginny, Stefan and Daphne made me laugh.
Remus’ reaction to the prospect of a skinny-dipping Luna made me laugh, as did all of the males burying their heads in their hands when Luna undressed completely.
Did you mean to write “’muggle martial arts” rather than “muggle material arts”?

I laughed like a drain (laughed raucously) at “I had to use your snake” out of Daphne’s mouth at Harry.
I love the three girls’ newly developed/acquired confidence and poise.
Yay! at Luna having become the eighth member of the group.
Yum! at the sound of that “preteen fighting force”.

Those twinkly bits on the Crouch Manor just makes it look even more sinister in my mental pic of the Crouch Manor.
Hey there, Winky. I’m very pleased to meet you.
I love it that Daphne’s ball gown has a pocket (as I do any dress that has pockets) for Cyrene to be in.

Yay! at Daphne knowing unladylike words.
Cyrene the now shrunken basilisk sounds like such a fundamentally decent creature, a mensch of a basilisk, really, that I’m livid with anger at Tom Riddle having enslaved Cyrene, basically.
I liked very much the feminist and victorious encounter the three girls had Tom Riddle junior down in the Chamber of Secrets.

I’d have taken Alec up on his offer of mead. I’m a total sweet drink fiend.
I probably shouldn’t have laughed but Daphne chasing away that Ravenclaw firstie (come to think of it, it was probably Luna, which make my laughter, in hindsight, such a cruel thing to have done) made me laugh.
Poor Luna!
AW! I appreciated hearing Sienna’s back-story.

Vapour’s furious look at Harry’s casting aspersions on her handling of blizzard conditions made me snort with laughter.
When I was little I wanted to go on an overnight train (we called them “sleep trains”) SO bad. The description of the inside of the boys’ compartment in/on the Polar Express brought those memories back.
Yum! at the cozy sound of those furs all over the Skonk Castle.
AW! At the mental pic of all of the house elves of Skonk Castle dressed in their tiny but thick fur robes.
I don’t think there is any house elf anywhere that would manage to look or act or sound similar to Marley.
Yum! for the mental pic I got of that eagle feather quill Hermione sent, though the wand holster from Neville also sounds very nifty, as do the dagger and scabbard from Mad-Eye, Kingsley, Remus and Sirius.
Wow, at what Alec gave Harry, though that Firebolt…I can totally understand all broom crazy boys everywhere going a tiny bit mad.

Right now, after hearing “Neville can ask all the questions he wants – it’s how anyone learns” out of Harry Potter’s mouth, I want to snog that Harry Potter to a standstill.
I adored vindictive Hermione and what came out of her mouth.
AW! At the mental pic of Fang in his quite humongous dog coat.
Neville’s amended tale of how Hermione got Snape to let her watch him brew the Wolfsbane potion for Remus (where would Stefan be getting his if he’s going home to Norway?) made me snort with laughter.
“for the Weasleys”, not “for the Weasley’s”.
“Gran thinks you’re a good influence” out of Neville’s mouth made me snort with laughter.

AW! At Hermione’s concern and sympathy for Stefan.
“You know they’re only”, not “You known they’re only”.
“toss-up” should be hyphenated.
“even more dishevelled than usual”, not “even more dishevelled from usual”.
The Greengrass women with their customary silver jewelled stiletto daggers sound as badass as it is possible to be.
I’m the same as Susan. If I were to carry a jewelled stiletto dagger or even just an ordinary stiletto dagger I’d also probably cut my own leg off by accident.
“the Malfoys throw”, not “the Malfoy’s throw”.
“wangle an initiation”, not “wrangle and invitation”.
“’long-suffering” should be hyphenated.
“your parents’ memory”, not “your parents memory”.
What a cool message for Snape to send to Harry silently.
And only very slightly less cool was the detention Snape dished out to Draco Malfoy for Malfoy having thrown his eating knife at Harry.