Total MEGA cringe for this author and this story!

This story is just as “great” (read: horrible) as Power Rangers Super Megaforce!

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

please update

Kind of lost interested as you went for the sex scenes route to be honest... It was more interesting despite how flat Harry came across and how truly unbelievable it is that only a single Harry in infinity, which is infinite, didn't go after vengeance.

It was still somewhat entertaining but combining all those things has caused me to lose interest. Good luck with the story.

Wow, that was NOT something I’d expect from harry.

Sakura is a possessed human shell!

This will be quite interesting.

Things are going to be interesting.

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is this over

Honestly, your grammar really needs work.

The whole thing with Harry watching Sakura get gang raped and did nothing about it is really not at all believable either. He might be "apathetic" because he doesn't trust anyone anymore, but that doesn't mean he'd let someone get raped when he could do something about it. His lack of action makes it so that he's not even really Harry Potter at all anymore, which is pretty bad. There's a difference between changing a character due to events in their life affecting them in a big way, and completely erasing a character's personality.

Harry would have saved Sakura, even if he had to wipe everyone's memories of it afterward.

He wouldn't have essentially helped the rapists get away with it by making sure no one interrupted them.

Furthermore, the pairing listed is Harry/Medea/Sakura. How could it be at all appropriate for Sakura to feel any love for Harry after she saw that he stood by and watched her get gang raped? If Harry truly cared so little, he wouldn't date her at all, he'd have killed her. Yet, it seems like he's sparing her and eventually dating her? I call bullshit.

You're leaning way too heavily on the rather childish concept that Harry is "apathetic". He's clearly not apathetic because he's constantly feeling things and expressing emotions in one form of another (even if it's mostly annoyance or self-denial of his own arousal). Actual apathy would be him actually not feeling anything. The way you're using "apathy" is just a bad excuse for Harry to say he feels something, but then not do anything about it to be edgy.

"This is really hot and I'm super horny. Ah, but I'm apathetic so I'm going to pretend I'm not aroused." Basically half the story so far, because you constantly bring it up.

Harry feels less like an actual character and more like a bland mechanism for you to push through your poorly realized fantasies. You need to put more effort into making him seem like a real person instead of what seems to be basically 1-3 character traits that repeat themselves in a repetitious manner. "I'm "apathetic". I'm rude to everyone because I "don't care". I'm a Sorcerer so I'm super strong." and repeat, and repeat.

I guess it could be that you just don't understand what the word apathy means. You're Indonesian and it seems like your English really isn't very good, so it's a possibility.

The sad thing is that this story could be really interesting if it were written by someone who had a better grasp on the English language and also had more skill in writing an actual story with decent dialogue, formatting, and plot. I like the idea of Harry being a True Sorcerer. I like the idea of him being Zelretch's apprentice. I even like the idea of Harry joining the Grail War to destroy the system. Harry falling in love with Medea is also a pairing I'll always support.

The problem is that this story is very poorly executed.

Is this story over

love this fic

Best chapter yet.

As you can tell from previous reviews I didn't like Harry not being as apathetic as you like to emphasise, he is also inconsistent which I don;t like either.

But with this chapter I can see it may be my misconception. It seems to me Harry isn't "actually" apathetic, but someone "trying" to be apathetic. Which makes some sense. So I'll let of on the raging at Harry not being apathetic enough to suit my back heart.

Still think he is kinda pathetic at times.

Lemon was well done. Japanese suffix do not go with English names however. I find "Lord Harry" fits better. Potential use for some role play sex.

Welp.
Looking forward to more.
Keep it up.