That was confusing reading but I jus couldn't put it down.

This was very difficult to follow. Also, besides Jayne, most of the characters were two dimensional, especially Simon. I did not faibdany angst, only boredom.

River was reduced to a background object. I do not understand why she prioritized allience over her crew.

I know I'm a little late to the party...I really like this, a little confusing in places and all together a decent story, but I have questions...What is going to happen with Inara? Is she going to quit? Will Inara and Mal finally get it on?

I don't really know why I'm asking, I doubt I'll get a reply with this story being ten years and all.

I am all sorts of up and confused. I don't think I understood at any point whether the story was going or coming? I am at a loss because I want to understand, I am sure that by not understanding I am missing something-but I can't follow, it's too jumpy. Arg.

Disgruntled-Jen

Mid-Page page mark (and loving every word-though I catch myself a little confused at times, wording's a little ragged.)

Cheers Jen

Wow, that was a fascinating story. I love most the way how you wrote Simon: that his whole world is his sister and he would do things for her that he would never do if not for or because of her. His main concern is River, for Mal it's his crew, and Simon has never considered himself as part of the crew. I loved that by the end of the fic he realizes that no matter what he is crew and he is responsible for them just as much as he is responsible for his sister, and he gives up her sister for them. And I loved the Zoe/Simon interaction, it was beautifully written, and I also loved Simon's mutiny and the fact that he became captain /even if it was temporary/: I think if the show would have run for some years there would be a time when Mal would have had to face with a situation similar like in this fic.

So very well done, and thank you.

Oh, wow. That was uber-angsty and made me want to cry at certain bits, but it was also pretty phenomenal. I read it with a heavy heart the entire time, just thinking about how powerful this would've been to watch, had it been an episode (or two or three). I really disliked Simon in this, for being so stupid, and I disliked Book when I thought he was going to betray EVERYONE, but by the end I felt better about both of them. Interesting take on Book's history with the Alliance by the way, "Angel of Death" seems creepily fitting. Your characters were spot-on, and the fic was REALLY well written overall, I really enjoyed it. Nice work!

I do have a question though, why did Mal want to keep Jayne "out of the way" in the first place, and make up the whole birthday thing? Maybe I'm just missing something, but I didn't get it.

I just found this story and wanted to tell you how impressed I am with it. It read just like a motion picture screenplay. Simon and Kaylee are my favorite characters and I'm glad you found a very nice, completely in character way for them to finally get together.

Well done. Easily the best fic I've read.

I just wanted to say thank you so much!

The best firefly fic I've ever read!

I think you captured all of the characters perfectly but I particularly liked your Wash lines.

Just amazing, thank you

heb

ps. Sorry this is not very constructive.

He! The good guys weren't blown up, it ends peacefully, there's a cool description or two about Serenity flying, and I get me a nice Mal/Kaylee moment (even though he's a mean old man and tries to run away from her at first)... sigh. This is what great Firefly fiction is all about.

Beautifully handled, tense in all the right moments and fast-paced in others, touching and heartbreaking all at once. I'm going to run out of adjectives pretty soon, but I don't think there are enough. Here, this should sum it up: Shiny!

As I stumble over myself trying to get to the conclusion, I'll leave a review of this chapter, so please forgive any typos as I'm trying to do this as quick as possible and raed the end.

Mal's "Crew. Captain." was almost too much for me; I was in tears I was laughing so hard and alternately saying, "You're god damn right." I dislike the character of Simon so much... and you have him down to a T. It felt like I was watching en episode and screaming in frustration at him onscreen. And I adore Mal's slip when he says Kaylee's name before telling Simon to keep his mouth shut to the crew.

Excellent tension during the Alliance moments and before /i forget I hae to say that the scene of Mal in the crowd was incredivle, like he was an island in a sea of people... then he sees Inara across the way and it's beautiful. Clicking the little arrow now.

Oh, poor poor Mal. Your description of River transversing his memories is perfectly blended, no harsh lines that made me look at the page and go, "Huh? What the hell was th- oh now I get it." Wonderfully conveyed, especially the memories of Mal and Zoe and the fact that she's still his silent second, reinforcing his orders all but once, and that once made for a kick ass set of words that will have me both smiling and sighing for a good long while.

The end with each of the characters, Kaylee keeping the silent engines company, Wash and Zoe up on the bridge, Inara back where she started... and that Angel of Death- wow. Talk about dramatic.

Arg! No! Stupid Inara needs to know when to shut her mouth... but for the greater good and all...

Sorry it took me so long to get around to this, but now that I've read it I'm clicking on the next chapter, dying to know what happens. This one had me confused. Really confused, like I was watching an enthralling tennis match. Watching River, then Inara, River, Inara, River, Kaylee, Simon, Inara, River, Jayne, River, Mal... damn that was good. Kept me on the edge of my uncomfortable computer chair! ;)

Perfecto! You are so good at dialogue. I really enjoyed this, it wraps up so well. NOW you can write the **NEXT ONE** and explain how Inara and Mal work things out. OH and I really like that part. How he confronts her about not wanting to be a "companion". HURRY UP AND DO THE NEXT ONE!

When the gray uniform leaves his sight, he drops his challenging gaze, which swiftly turns to distress when he sees his sister, sitting across from him. She is also bound and gagged, secured to her seat, their knees only two feet apart. Eyes closed, she whimpers softly, trembling in her sleep.

Simon’s eyes begin well with tears, his face reddening.

Joss should have done something like this in the series. It gives Simon some depth. Yeah he is trying to save his sister before but he was mostly stuffy and aloof. This scene makes him human, reachable maybe even likable. Incredibly well done. I haven't read the next chapter but I hope you have everybody living.