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I dearly love the way you have with words in descriptions

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That whole exchange between Flitwick and Harry was terrifying to the nth degree. The level of subtlety would have gone completely over my head if it hadn't been so nicely deconstructed, and I'm pretty sure I still didn't understand all the implications associated with the conversation anyway.

:).

A terrible world, beautiful presentation. Beginning the reading of chapter 2.

Mmm the character portayal of Filius was nicely done. I am in two minds about this chapter though. The reason for this is that I come to fanfiction for escapism and to avoid religion. Cause there are lots of fights regarding religion in my home and I really don't want to deal with it. But here you are adding religion into your fanfiction which makes things difficult to read for me. If people kept things non religious and stopped using the name of a historical religious figure as a curse word I would be a happy clam. Seeing as you have added religion to your foreshadowing, implying that it will have a larger part to play in the future, means I have suddenly become uncomfortable in continuing to read this. Which is a shame because I had genuinely enjoyed reading this until now. But I really don't want my religious issues to rear their head due to reading of the religion you chose to use as a backdrop to your fic. Thank you for sharing what you have until now. I have truly enjoyed it. Take care of yourself.

Wow such an emotionally charged chapter with several hilarious moments and dramatic pauses. I think this is my favourite chapter.

I loved Voldemort teaching magical theory and the dark arts with the misanthropes united come to the dark side we have cookies sales pitch thrown in. Makes me wonder though if it hadn't been implied that the body would fail as a rotting soul-less corpse, the curse he placed on the position would be broken since he IS in fact teaching DADA. If he wanted to stay longer he would have to find some way to anchor his soul shard to Quirrell's body so it doesn't keep decomposing.

Severus is almost always a favourite character of mine. His commentary on the staff meeting and on Qui(Voldemort)rrell and HIS commentary on Dumbledore was delightful and very entertaining. The poignant realisations of Severus and his life bartering himself to both the weaver and the viper, his heart with the dead and the implications of a suicidal deathwish perhaps or a realistic examination of the fact that he most probably won't come out alive in the next war, was painfully melancholic. Neatly wrapping up a masterfully inspired chapter.

Thank you very much for sharing.

"That night, Harry sleeps under bronze-blue, and dreams of Hogwarts in silver-green." It is quite telling that there are no echoes of gold-red in his dreams. Most of his mind, interactions and being are based from Tom Riddle, it makes me wonder what of Lily Evans he received. Severus claims it was her fire, and that somewhat rings true for the representation of her in the mind scape was of a being exemplifying fire and blood and passion but not coherent in thought like the horcrux shard of Tom Riddle was.

"Minerva waits behind her desk, elbows digging into the lacquered surface, nerves pinched, spine rigid. Staring out the window, quiet, edgy, biding." Biding implies patiently waiting, but the context implies the opposite. If anything she is impatient; waiting on a razor's edge, anxiety crawling up and down her spine like ants trudging up an anthill.

I liked your Anthony Goldstein, I think he has much potential. An eminently affable character. With teeth.

Your Padma exudes gossip queen vibes with a Slytherin touch. It is reminiscent of a well portrayed Pansy Parkinson in some of the better written Harry Potter fics.

The chapter in general was great, and quite amusing.
Thank you for sharing.

Mmm yes, depending on what kind of Salazar he was watching him react to and deal with Toilrry (Harry) would have been fascinating. Especially since the Founders have no pre-formed prejudices regarding politeness born from interactions with Tom Riddle. Will Godric Gryffindor act like Tom's Albus Dumbledore? I must admit, the thought of lead poisoning due to lead cauldrons causing Salazar Slytherin's madness is rather plausible. Lead poisoning long term effects may also account for much of the illogical reasons for many wizarding traditions and laws. Must research if it is transferred through the generations as a legacy. After all many mental psychoses are inheritable, as is transgenerational trauma. Potions being what you take to promote healing when you are sick, even morning sickness may have a stomach calmer prescribed and if it is made in a lead cauldron, well...

The chat with the Sorting Hat was interesting. Quirrel and Albus's reactions were too.

The winner though was the neat efficient way Toilrry trapped and shattered Draco in his own words and with his own assumptions and expectations. I feel a bit guilty that I found such enjoyment in watching Draco be cut to size especially because a soft, spoiled, and pampered young boy like Draco is in no way prepared for Toilrry. At all. Doesn't change my enjoyment of it though. Oh well, thanks for the chapter and for sharing it. It WAS an enjoyable experience. Take care.

I just pinned down what this reminds me of. The House of Potter Rebuilt by DisobedienceWriter. Not because of any particular connected themes or shared ideas but rather from the feel of the story. Your Harry is an extremely intelligent individual. That Harry is intelligent, yes but he has more of an intuitive, thoughtful, introspective kind of intelligence.

I think this is the first time Filius Flitwick has been slated a major role in a fanfic that I have read. I look forward to seeing how you develop this character. He has so much potential which is mostly ignored. I expect you won't be doing so. And I look forward to reading it.

This is a great beginning and a highly interesting premise. I was somewhat surprised Harry was kind to Hagrid. I am uncertain Tom would be.

Overall a great start! Thanks for sharing!

It is more pleasant to read without having to reach for the dictionary 4 times in a chapter. The plot is enthralling in a morbid way. Kinda like watching a train crash. You know its going to happen, you know its going to be gruesome, and you know there is nothing you can do to stop it, to save the lives in the train. Harry gains Gellert's Grimoire, Tom gains Draco's body, Voldemort finds out his locket is missing, Severus is not mind raping Harry so he doesn't know what he has been up to, Dumbledore is still a hypocrite. Quirrell's body is fading fast so Voldemort needs a new vessel. The Peverell family were necromancers. Firenze trying to put the time line back in order, heh, he is far, far too late. Harry/Tom/Lily was the catalyst, certainly, but he(they) is not responsible for the actions of others. Voldemort swallowing Quirrel and his subsequent actions do not lay at Harry's feet. Minerva and Filius separating themselves from Dumbledore are catalysed by Harry and his changes certainly, but they are each responsible for their own actions which will reap their consequences. Adding the Flamels into this melting pot of volatile ingredients will no doubt be a fascinating experience.

Not sure why your works dont have at least a thousand reviews and favourites, the writing and ideas are certainly better than several which have 4000 or more better than many which have 1-2k perhaps a lack of exposure. Not to worry, soon enough I am sure this will top those lists too. Well, if they can slough through the first 2-3 chapters where the story stops being confusing and begins to be interesting. Especially the later chapters where you tone down the attempt to expand our (your?) vocabulary. It is better than the constant misuse of the words defiantly and definitely and other such spelling and grammatical errors commonplace in the upper echelons of fanfiction review and favourite lists. Outlawing the animagus because it is soul magic...politics again, oh dear. Yes I agree the Egyptians WOULD be well versed in soul magics, even the non magical side WAS obsessed with the soul and what happens when you die. So it follows that the goblins who spend so much time in Egypt attempting to rob tombs Would know much about soul magics. It makes much sense. It also makes sense that it was something Lily DID actively that spared her son from the Killing Curse. Dumbledore's idea of Love falls flat in that in history there would be many many other mothers who gave their lives for their children and such children still died. Ancient magics mixing with two veins of soul magic would do it. I do like it when someone looks at things logically. It makes things much more interesting. Thank you for sharing this fascinating piece with us, I hope one day you finish it, because seeing that kind of Slytherin/Ravenclaw Harry is a treat!

I thoroughly enjoyed Filius the utter BAMF that he is kicking Albus down verbally. Verbal evisceration thy name is Filius Flitwick. It's odd though, because normally I highly dislike character bashing fics. In this one though? Totally deserved. Well written, well done. Adding elements of Goblin culture and the clashes found when it meets wizarding culture, fantastic and very believable. Thank you for sharing this chapter! So much fun! The Flamels should be very fun too. Quirrel's insinuations and poor, poor Severus. Absolute GOLD! Thanks again for sharing!

I've been listening to "welcome to the show" while reading this. The mood it creates suits the majority to a T making this immeasurably enjoyable. Loved this chapter. The staff meeting was GOLD. Truly fantastic. It made the times I had to reach for the dictionary (4) well worth it. Thank you for sharing!

It is good you have gone through and picked up all the typos you could, otherwise this exercise in wordsmithing would be rather hilariously awful. As it is, I am enjoying the plot and character development immensely. The obscure sometimes awkwardly allocated words which demand diligent Internet inquiries grants ghastly headaches. So I don't quite appreciate that. Some of the descriptive passages were a touch too gory for my taste. Others used euphemism to make your meaning clear whereas some merely obfuscated the meaning and wrapped the reader in clouds of confusion. I admit to skimming the areas where you chose descriptive frenzies to portray your character's tumultuous emotions. They were also headache inducing and nausea producing as they seem to be filled with gory symbolic language. I continue to read for the plot line and for the characters you have created who show so much depth and multifaceted personalities that it is a pleasure to read of them. I enjoy your Harry and your Filius. I will continue reading. Thank you for sharing. :)

ho man this is good