You have this tendency to have people on the "wrong" side of an argument devolve into spluttering fools. Usually it has been Walburga, but this chapter it was McGonagall. It just obliterates any sort of intelligence projected by that character and it really hurts how your reader is going to view them overall. It's also just boring to read, as it basically turns into one side monologuing for an extended period of time.

Walburga is just too much. At least in canon she had a little sense.

So you managed to make Bellatrix entirely unlikable. She's weak - at fighting - that's normally like her whole thing, far too easily embarrassed, loses focus in a fight, cruel but not intelligent about it.. it's just, unappealing. And most of it seems to be because you want to play off her using humor. Hopefully you don't continue using her as a romantic interest after all that.

Very clever way to go about it.

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This was a fabulous story. Masterful fight scenes, a well-considered plot and more. Not something I see often on FFN. Thank you for writing and sharing it.

Awesome story, really enjoyed it

For anyone who is not aware, Chilord passed away in August of 2018.

Very good! I’m favoriting this!

Just want to let you know that I loved this. It was great. Witty and entertaining. I stayed up late to read it. Woke up early. Laughed out loud and almost cried. Fabulous.

Dang Harry

I'll freely admit that I'm not usually a fan of super! Harry fics. However, your characterizations and the paths they take are very well done. The AU nature of some of your actual and potential pairings is also very interesting. Thanks for your hard work on this, I hope the cancer treatment you mentioned in an earlier chapter has been successful and that we will have the good luck of seeing further material from you here or on your other sources.

No corset for Bella this time around lol? How did she get in his room, I don’t imagine Harry left it open and or easily assessible to anyone? So I wonder what Lucius and Charles face looked like when they saw the dead basilisk? Interesting that Lucius berates Harry for not respecting him as Head of House Potter but other than Charles getting Harry a job and Lucius getting the sword they have not done anything familia for Harry for him to respect. They both know he is a Potter yet they haven’t offered him a place to stay a means Of support nothing lol.

Lol I do believe that Harry made a bit of an impression on those old war horses eh? Is Tom going to use the Inferi now?

So Charlus isn’t James father in this story...interesting. Lol Harry is having everything just steamroll to hell in a hand basket quite fast all because of a drink in a tavern he never even got to taste lol. Is their any of the original elite left if the Knights or has the Storm Chaser got rid of them?