Okay, I know you're probally not going to, considering how long it's been, but please, please, PLEASE update!

Hi! I'm reading your story and just wanted to drop a line. I've been enjoying the premise of the story quite well, but I had a small criticism.

When you're writing, you do a lot more telling rather than showing. I know, 'show, don't tell!' is probably every creative writing teacher's catch phrase, but it really does apply. At one point in this chapter particularly, you say something along the lines of 'Xavier and Orroro took a moment to decipher his heavily accented speach' (not an exact quote, but I'm certain you can find the location). It's a rather stiff moment for the reader, and it makes it challenging to 'get into' the story. If instead you had chosen to SHOW you may have had 'Storm raised her eyebrows as the boy began speaking in his Australian accent, Xavier shook his head with a bemused expression.' Not the best, but still- action! If you were watching this as a episode.. Which would you prefer? The visual clues or narrator saying 'HIS ACCENT CONFUSED THEM'? Writing is, obviously, different, but you are still writing for an audience, it isn't a technical manual.

Anyway, I just wanted to mention it because it's something I keep noticing.

please finish, I know it has been a long time, but I would like to hear the rest of the story

I just wondered across this and it's a shame that it was never continued. It's wonderfully written and has a great plot. Bravo! I wish I could read more!

plz plz plz more chapters cos im loveing this more chapters asap

I like this fanfic. Please update soon. Thanks.

I ghate ya You just left it hanging Why oH WHY7?

Love the story! I like how you have a couple different things going that aren't really obvious. Update asap! (Yes, I know you haven't updated since 04 so all the more reason to continue with the fic) =) Also, in reference to the younger students that you don't know how the act...you didn't really miss much with them, so you can make them whatever way you want! It's a fanfic! But if you really want to know what they're like youtube it.

Oh for fuck's sake please update damn it! You're killing me here!

i like this i hope you update soon :)

i love the story, can't wait for an update

her psyches are gone? i hope you are kidding! i think its kinda intersting to see this as Rogue's level 5 mutant power, like jean's in the movie. i don't think its very intrigueing to have the personas simply disappear, especially when you could have so many different things happen with them! i am still interested in your story. you are very creative and i look forward to reading the rest of your story! please update soon. angst, romance, drama, anything is fine, just make it something creative. your story is a lot different from other's i have read in this category and its quite refreshing. keep up the lovely work, and again i push the suggestion of keeping the psyches. i really think you hit something good them having more control over her, neat concept!

~liv

OH MY GOD YOU CANT LEAVE A CHAPTER LIKE THAT :o.great story but you HAVE to update.wait wait wait let me rephrase that. will you plz update cuz this is a really good story and you left it with a cliffie

cool! update soon.

very funny chapter. love the story.