Bang.

Once again, dead on with the bloody detail. I should try it some time I suppose.

Bang.

What is it with you and good detail? I wish I could write like that.

Bang!

This was amusing. I loved how you made Sands dead in the story. Nice touch.

This was amusing. I liked it. You know, sometimes I have to wonder if the government is watching these sorts of sites. Even if they are ust fan fic. I think they'd get a kick out of it.

I love this thing. Love it to death, because of it I'm probably gonna hunker down and read that "Queen of the South" book you mention in the footnotes. I can't really offer criticism, there are one or two typos in discreet places, but I see no fault with your characterization. Or rather, if there is I find the way you write them preferable to movie cannon. That is all. If anyone else ever starts talking to you, please write it down.

Sure wish you had more stories. I really enjoyed these.

*BANG*! What does bang mean? I don't know, it just sounded good. I hope you deside to right more, I really like!

I liked this. It was very crisp, dark and sort of fun at the same time (loved the retelling of what had happened during Day of the Dead), which makes it in a way rather like the movie. Will there be more?

more?

to flesh that out a little: i really like the story, you've done plenty of research (or let it come to you); your Sands is very recognizable but nevertheless with that personal twist brought on by (to the viewer/reader) unfamiliar settings. the mood is excellent, very dusty/gritty Mexico; good imagery. i like the relationship between El and Sands as business partners - not necessarily friends, in the usual sense of the word, but close, with some sort of mutual respect and a common goal.

very nice - i like. your El says very little and speaks volumes.
just two technicalities: "Sands tensed and consciously stopped himself from breaking a few bones for breaching his personal face" - should be "space", no? also, the last bit of chapter 4 is in italics.

Cool!

again, another really great chapter, I'm looking forward to seeing this continued... it will be continued right?

Hello! I read the other story- great (but bad me didn't review-sorry) I loved the tale being told of the blind hero! hahahahah. and the last line is the best, truely inspired.
"I heard you were dead." El's voice conveys no emotion.
Sands smiles.
"So did I."
That was just perfect.

I've commented on the preivious chapters, but I'm not sure if that was here or at Live Journal. I really like this one.
"Sometimes he wonders if that was, truly, the same man. It is not only the sunglasses Sands now holds on to like a lifeline. Nor the clothes: warm colors replaced with dead black. It is in the way the agent moves, the way he kills. It is the difference between a pampered pet that happens to have claws and a feral cat who fights for his life so often, he no longer sees it as something unusual.
"Now Sands, in black and with death by his side, is someone El understands."
Excellent stuff.