Giving up here , way too confusing .Sorry .

Honestly, your story is not bad, but there are some problems that I think I'd like to call to attention.

First, the pace is a little too slow for it to remain exciting and-

closely related to this is the fact that the plotline is way too scattered to make real sense sometimes. I'm all for long stories, however you seem to be jamming in facts and events that are not even near important enough to warrant the detailed descriptions you give them. Dont't misunderstand- I like detailed descriptions and well thought out plots, but that's just it; although you seem to have put a lot of thought into the story-line, in realizing your plans you have gotten a little caught up and lost in your own fantasy, wich may make sense to you, but is quite hard for a reader to decipher.

All in all I end up seriously confused through a good portion of the fic.

As an advice, maybe you could consider to write the mysteries of your stories in a more linear fashion, that is easier to follow. I'm not saying to give away the intrigue of the plot, only that it would serve you well to at least let the readers know exectly what to look out for. I hope that makes more sense to you then I fear it does, but I don't really have the time to go in depth now, and as I doubt this fic will ever be updated, I'm not even sure you even get to read this. Anyway, if you want you can send me a PM or something.

Cheers

I love the way you portray the castle.

Wow. This is amazing and a new favorite of mine. I love fics like this. Will this fic ever be updated or is it abandoned? I really want to find out what happens next.

I just read 6 chapters What is going on in this story? There are a lot of words in this story. What is going on? There is something you are not saying are we supposed to guess what is really hapoening?

This is good, but you really need to speed it up. It's not that don't absolutely love long stories, but this needs more action! And a bit more romance from the hunky Potions Master. So I implore you to please update!

Lots of love,

RainyDays

There should not be so many chapterss for just three days. The story is going to be way too long. It's good though.

This is a bit slow. The chapters are super long, which is a good thing, but they talk about nothing... But it's good so far.

amazing, I wish you luck with the writer's block and eagerly await more-

~~Lunadia~~

What is Harry not telling them?

AUGH! I really hope that you get over your writer's block, and that translating the story is helping at least a little. I really love this story, enough at least to re-read it even when it's not complete. Good luck on overcoming the writer's block, and hope that you can get out a chapter soon.

Nice story! can't wait till the next chapter. Love you story and hope to see more SOON! peas and carrots

~Suki

Hmm...last time you updated was last year and 41 chapters later and you barely have the intro-looks like you were really writing a book. Also the romance between Snape and Harry never did develop.

-Dani.

Das is sehr langweilich...

Great!

luv it! but it does have a LOT of info in the chapters, if you're not careful, it'd be easy to get lost.