*bows in awe* This is absolutely amazing. I'm new to FMA and having finished the series, I've been running around looking for stories to keep me occupied, and this is already one of the most fasinating.

There's a plot, one you seem to have quite a few twists and turns lined up for, and it's an original idea at that. That alone makes me squirm for more.

Slow but realistic changes between Roy and Ed are also good. Slow can be frustrating, but that's how life works, yes?

Your lines made me laugh (Ed and Breda's argument in the coach, for example), and believe it or not, I don't often react quite so loudly-I scared my cat!

I know it's been forever since you updated, I understand, but I do want to tell you not to give up-you have a gift for description and development that should not be ignored.

Lessa

Ooh, I like it a lot so far. I hope you'll update soon, & that the RoyEd you mentioned in the summary appears then. :D

I gotta say, I really like this so far. I adore how you're building things gradually between them, leaving enough hints to give us poor fangirls hope for tomorrow. *grin*

I'm also really sorry this doesn't have more reviews- it's better than a very large portion of the stuff I've found here, and you deserve masses of fannish reviews begging you to write more.

I hope there's another chapter in the offing.

Wow, this is pretty good :D I like that there's actually plot, and you're actually taking the time to develop a relationship between Roy and Ed instead of rushing into it. It's very interesting so far, I look forward to the next chapter!

Please can we have some RoyxEd? And when will Roy's will come back!

this sounds very interesting. i'll be looking forward to what happens.

-squeals- YAY! THE NEXT PART IS SO GOOD! I'm glad I could encourage you! I really don't want you to stop, this story is so very congenial! It's adictive, really! It's amazing on how you can write like that, you've inspired me to become an amazing writer like you! I know that would take me years and years, but I know that if I can practice, I'll become just like you! I look up to you, if you can call it that. I hope to hear from you soon, Bird-san! You're the best I've ever read! -gives Bird-san a bag of orenjis and nuzzles- Iie, iie! Really, you deserve those orenjis/oranges! Maybe we can talk on e-mail or RP on IM! Or, just talk! _ My e-mail is s4twigg as well as my IM! It's just s4twigg! I hope to hear from you, Bird-san! -clings to Bird-san's arm and grins- Will you be my sister? I have a weak spot for people who are better than me and that I can easily admit to it!

You're driving me crazy in a good way. Another great chapter! Your fanfic already has far more plot than half the fanfiction on this website combined. You've done a good job so far of creating Aerugo. I'm interested in where you're going to take it.

Also, thank you for the Riza/Roy no longer lovers teasers. I want more, obviously, but it's nice to see it develop in bits and pieces.

I loved the dream-totally creepy. I'm fascinated with dreams in the first place, so that's an instant plus, but I can relate to the horror of the dream because I had a very vivid dream once in which I saw my own decomposing body. I can't even describe the feeling it left me with when I woke up.

And now for the obligatory "Write more soon!" comment.

nn I like your story! please update when it is convent for you!

Omg.. this has got to be the greastest fanfic I have ever read.. It's so literate! I mean.. look at it! So well-written, so many words that most people don't understand, yet they do with how well you build around it! It's absolutely remarkable! I can't believe it! Please update soon! I can't wait to hear from you! It's so suspenseful and and saddening! And the way you describe the scenes going on around them! And speaking as if you ARE part of the militaty! It simply blows me away! This is the best fanfiction I have ever read, and I'm sure that's the same way with everyone else who has read. Please update soon, Bird-san! -gives Bird-san a bag of orenjis and clings to arm- Ja matte! Update soon, Bird-san! This is going to my favorites! -checks all of the choices-

This story so far is awesome. You've captured the nuances of the characters and their interactions while modifying them enough to make them your own. That subtle transformation between the characters in their original setting and the characters in a well written fanfiction is what makes fanfiction so special, I think. You have captured the essence of what makes the characters who they are (I've thoroughly enjoyed Ed and Roy's bantering by the way) but because your story is set as kind of an after everything else but sort of AU, you have the opportunity to adjust the characters due to the passage of time. I haven't actually finished the series so maybe this story isn't AU at all, so I apologize if I'm mistaken.

As far as the projected length goes, I'm prone to writing long epics myself, so I understand the temptation. Just don't take as long to write it as I have my story, please. Because I want to read more! That said, I love the slow pace you've set to develop the smut-I mean romance-because subtle romance is one of my favorite things. And things usually move far slower in reality than in a typical smutfic, so moving slowly is more accurate. Half the fun is in the buildup of tension anyway.

So, I hope to be reading more soon!

PS One last thing, I'm interested in your hints about Roy and Riza being former lovers. More, please.

Interesting~~ I like the gore *laughs evilly* Keep writing! :D

very cool story! write more soon, gotta know what's happening!

This is good writing. It's shaping up to be a really interesting story. The characterization is dead on, the dialogue is snappy and there's just the right amount of detail at the right time. It really flows and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes. I can wait as long as it takes for the lemon. Waiting just makes it that much better when it finally comes;)

Nice story, a refreshing change from most of the tripe found on I really enjoyed your characterizations of the jaded Roy Mustang and the more mature Edward. (And the fandom needs more good Ed/Roy fics. :D). My one major nitpick is your usage of "the Fullmetal". Otherwise, the grammer and spelling, as well as the narrative style are leaps and bounds above much of what has been posted in this fandom recently. An example that almost made me stop reading, (though I'm glad I didn't) was in the first chapter: "The Fullmetal scowled and brushed back blond strands from his face." The correct usage would be to use the full title, "The Fullmetal Alchemist" or the proper noun/nickname Fullmetal as you did in most of the dialog. Apart from that, great story and I look forward to reading more.