This one shot is really great! It is quite realistic, I liked how you manage to make the feelings progressive. I indeed also think that Athrun really cares for Kira, just like you said, it can be either a very deep frienship or a little more. This story was sad too, and Athrun is indeed selfish, he needs both Cagalli and Kira.

Anyway I loved it! Good job!

Beautiful.

Canon, or whatever, I sincerely believe that Athrun and Kira *do* complement each other.

And I agree with your theory on how Athrun obviously has some feelings - whether vague or not - for his friend.

I like the way you write Athrun too. D

I have to admit, even though I was falling deeper into the abyss of AthrunShinn, this piece of yours really proves that Athrun can't really live without Kira's presence nearby.

Cheers!

I love, love, love it. So don't be lonely, hons. *hugs* And now I want to know how it looks like with all your gorgeous layout! Do you have it posted somewhere? *hopeful*

About the flow, I think it does fine. Sometimes un-flow-iness can be an art if done right, and you did it right as far as I'm concerned. _ I love that line where Kira says he wouldn't be him if he were a girl. And the part where he cries at the end is touching. I've been seeing from Athrun's point of view until that point, and only then I realized how sad it must be from Kira's perspective too.

What the hell is wrong with you! Athrun and Kira! are you insane! Its supposed to be Kira Yamato and Lacus Clyne..and Athrun Zala and Cagalli Yula Attha! (OMG!) I hate this fanfic! you suck!

i like it u should write more!

fudge, sumthing wrong with the public library's computer. it wunt let me log in o.o; _ The thing is, u finished watching SEED, and it's hard to think of asukira when there's the official couple/canon crap. Of course Athrun doesn't act on impulse... that only happens when it comes to Kira. XD Oh, and ur writing isn't bad to me. As for the part that nothing flows? Who said stuff just HAD to flow? -_-; Writing isn't a river, u kno.

The ending was kinda sad. I hates it when Kira cry... he's so innocent and i wish he can smile always. I don't hate this fan fic. I like it very much. Because it's Asukira... because u wrote their personalities so well. Aw, i hope u feel better and less sad and lonely soon. does ruin all the font and everything... _; Dunt think they're ever gonna fix it.

Btw, i hate how Athrun cares for Cagalli. Thank god, at least they're twins... Cagalli can be mistaken as Kira... i do honestly believe he luv kira. As a close/best friend is what's shown but it's hinted as more than dat. That song is pretty cool, it's in spanish... isn't it? Hope u write more asukira fics!

-chikage

Beautiful. The tension in this story is so thick! The "I thought you were a boy too" scene is especially loaded. I kept expecting some hidden truth to drop on the three like a bomb; the suspense is terrific. AU or not, the characterization struck me as very faithful to the series. A perfect balance of tension and tenderness, and an unflinching exploration of this love triangle.

despite everything you think about it, I actually liked this a lot. the fact that you wrote it in pieces didn't take away from it at all, I thought. the way you wrote Athrun was brilliant. the complexity of his relationship with Cagalli and Kira was fascinating to watch unfold. well done .

XD! Mimi...you are a very funny person ! (Loved your short comments on everything you put in the A/N)

Keke...I'm the total opposite. I must force myself to write the whole thing in one sitting or else I'll never finish -.-;

ANYWAY! I really do like your characterization of Athrun (Yes, I don't believe you did a bad job...). And it's true, with all that canon fodder they've been shoving down our throats, it's hard sometimes. So kudos to you for this lovely story.

Cagalli is nicely portrayed as well...though I do wonder if she's suspicious. You know...with Yzak being so observant, how can Cagalli not keep a closer eye on Athrun?

I especially loved the ending !

Well, continue to write soon hun XD

~Spyrit