It's good story but I think author notes are supposed to be in a chapter and not by themselves. And saying that you want to own Hayden Christensen in episode 2 is kind of disturbing

Okay, your story is very bland. You have a good premise, however the execution of your idea is shaky. For example, you group together a conversation in a paragraph without spacing it out. Also, you are not descriptive enough and do not develop your characters, or include anything in your plot that might incite thought. Your story is vague, and does not demonstrate a higher level of thinking.

Definitely like a big, nasty, flying creature...like a taradactyl, but like differnt looking (go crazy here lol im just throwing ideas), and call it a contrantad or something like, but it should def. be something flying, cuz then flips and jumps can be involved! lol update asap!

great story.

Oh . . . I'm always in the mood for a cute AP story, haha. Well, there are a lot of different directions, but what about an unexpected war on Naboo or something? Feel free to email.

I love this story! As far as your writer's block goes I have no idea what to tell you, me personally I would like to see something happen to almost turn Padme instead of Ani...hmm...I really can't see that...

HES HOTTER IN EPISODE THREE! nd ive noticed that she still isnt on the character list

GOOD WORK

love your story! it gets better and better! i dont really have any ideas about what should happen next to help with your writers block (cuz im not all that creative) but im sure that there are TONS of people reading your story that can help. KEEP UPDATING! :-)

i'm likin it so far, but i think you need to add a bit more detail into your chapters, and you need to skip lines between when people are saying things, it get's kinda confusing, but i really like the story and where it's going so far. plz update

I love your story. I know what it feels like to get into the trap of writer's block. I had to delete one of my stories as I just could not find anyway to continue it. :(. I sincerely hope that you do not get caught in that net. I have two suggestions to help you out with your story:

1.) Padme becomes annoyed with Anakin - perhaps he becomes bossy and unappreciative of his wife's attempts to channel the force

2.) Padme becomes pregnant threatening everything they have established in relation to the Jedi Order

I wish I could come up with more ideas to help you, but I am running kind of dry myself. I hope that they helped you, sort your way through the difficulties of writer's block.

I thought it was great! Update soon!

Hey I really liked ur story but hope u could update more

(sorry im just so obsessed cant wait to finish reading ur story)

I like this story it's very intresting please update soon!

This is Freakin Awesome Pleae Continue