Very good. Your use of language is very strong and you're very creative. Keep up the good work!

I usually don't really like 1st person POV, but this was done very well. Your use of grammar and spelling is very good, and the seriousness of it was different from other fics I've seen. The ending seemed fitting too - after all, assassins wouldn't let us live after telling us their secret, huh? Very well done! I enjoyed it!

WOW, I really loved this, a very original idea. Keep up the good work. lol see ya

All I can say is that was fucking amazing! You have a really talent, keep on writing and I’ll keep on reading! lol see ya

ping? i'm thinking more '...'

lol

anyway this is original. you made it like i really have seen him floating around town. and the use of the numbers is cool

dude...this is freakin awesome... i love the style, with tala talking to the reader, and then shoots them...me. *gulps* and he seemed in-character, actually...though sort of...twisted. o.O but that's understanable with the background you gave him. *nodnod* amazing writing, beautiful word usage, original and very cool idea. :)

keep up the brilliant work.

have a nice day

O.O ...I love this ficy!(although its a bit unusual...)

Very nice... and unexpected.

*smiles* Certainly lovely.

WOW! WAY cool! You should make another chapter for this! It's one of the best stories I have ever read!

I really loved this one! The ending is just SO COOL! *Long – long monologue*, and another killing before the main planned one. Sounds harsh. Yet so ANGSTY!

I've never thought of Tala and Kai as brothers before, you made it sound very nice! And besides, they both are my total favorites, and this is the second reason why I fell in love with this story of yours.

I have to repeat: the story is really great and original! Keep the excellent writing up!

Truly Yours,

FlEsH BoNeZ AnD BlOoD.

wow. that was soo good. It was almost humours with the casualness.

Longest title ever! You can kind of dance to it. Lol. Maybe not.

I have to say for a one-shot filler for the next chapter of Comrades this was awesomely written! I love the way Tala is talking to the reader (Me in this case OMG XD). And he and Kai are the hottest brothers around. And I'm not one of the annoying girls who drools over them. Nope. Not I!

This was really original in its plot and a great read! You're so creative! And Tala was done very well in character. Didn't get to see too much of Kai which is too bad. Or maybe good since I'd have drooled over my keyboard. Oops, I said I don't drool. Oh well lol.

OMG so cool! I'd love it if you made more one-shots. Because they're awesome!

I hope to see an update for Comrades soon too. Yay! The BBoys rule! Voltaire is mean! Tyson eats too much lol! I'm being random!

Write more soon!

~'AngeLhearteD'~

Yay! It was pretty...uh, I think? I'm glad this was just a one-shot, strangely enough. Works better that way. And I LOVE the ending.

Tala and Kai XD Uh, distracted. Back to the review! Uh, yes. Loved the description. Very nice writing style.

Not such a big fan of AU, but this was great! Well done!

I'm going to stop now, before I get totally random.

Chibi_Lothlen