God, Rin is a creepy dude, isn't he? I never really gave him much thought, but now that you've said that...

Anyway, I love this; it's a great mix of humor and a little bit of something darker underneath the surface. Well played!

lol love this story!

You have captured both characters perfectly. Very nicely done -

"...Nooj's gaze flickers up in a gesture that speaks volumes, as all his gestures do."

This is an excellent line!

Really this is all very good, you've captured both Rin and Nooj quite elegantly in just a few words, and even the throwaways about Gippal are just right. You seem to have a strong sense of all these characters, both their words and their actions. A nice little piece overall.

What a delightful discovery! I enjoyed this very much. You are post-modern in your style and elegant in your language. You do Lucas honour with this story. Bravo!