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i hope there is a sequel!

It wasn't too bad...

I liked everything up until they actually had sex...a bit more detail would have been nice there.

But all in all a nice long yaoi...I loved the pairing though they should've watch more of Shu and Eiri :)

Well done

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Well done with getting the reader all hyped at the beginning, I could feel my body reacting in time, however a little more practice in writing the actual sex.

Well done none the same and good luck with future fics

-Aki-

i liked the story but is k still married cause thats a little nasty if his married and cheatin on his wife

I loved the premise of this-so funny! (,) I wish the ending was a little more fleshed out, but other than that it was good.

"Um...no. Your mother is out of the question here."-LOL. (O) Was laughing my ass off at that. (,)

Very good story. I liked the lemon really well.

Just one thing... Men don't have a g-spot; only women do. Men have a prostate. So... you might want to do a little more anatomy research next time. ; Other than that, wonderful.

Interesting! I've never heard of K X Suguru...And I find that I like it. Good job! _

yeah i love this story

sequal! sequal! please write a sequal! lol. luved it. very nice. they should use the kinky stuff in the sequal!

i loved it and i want u to read my story please it has yuki shuchi fugisaki and hiro in it to but later i think

YES!SEQUEL GOOD!SEQUELLURVE!THIS STORY ALSO EQUEALS LURVE!SO HOT,UBER SEXY,YAOI!*Hypervenilates*(I did not spell that right!)

~~Sirius LIVES~~

I just had a chance to read this today. It was very well written. I enjoyed it. Thnks.

Ahaha! I read this at AFF (either that or I read it in my dreams, and that means I'm psychic! That'd be cool...).

I'd have commented there, but for some reason, my computer won't let me comment anything there...

So I'll just have to be stupid here.

Good story! It sounds a wee bit ameteurish (sorry, can't spell), but only a bit. It's on the better side of the spectrum. And as K says, "Practice makes perfect!"

Write more!

Toodles!

Wow.. awesome!