| Reviews for The Birthday |
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   MixBerkaan chapter 1 . 10/9/2014 I love your story, though there was one thing that confused me a little. At the beginning of the chapter, you stated that Ed had gotten his arm back, but then in the battle with wrath, you said he sharpened his automail into a blade. Was there something I missed? |
| Guest chapter 12 . 6/20/2014 Please continue this is well written and I wish it to have an awesome ending. I know u can do it |
| nick chapter 12 . 6/17/2012 make more |
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/28/2011 Lol 'protection' yeh, ahem... |
| ella chapter 12 . 9/20/2011 I loved them all but in chapter 11 i was like omg ed lost the philophers stone and gave it to the humunculy. Amazing story by the way wouldnt mind if u rewrote 11. |
| Sam chapter 12 . 2/18/2011 Please write more. Please. |
| Rieko.Nishihara chapter 12 . 6/20/2010 Aww you just gotta come on...I love this story...even if it is a few yeas old |
| matthew chapter 2 . 4/5/2010 wow that arm thing was very clever an made atleast a little sense |
| matthew chapter 1 . 4/4/2010 wtf how did his metal arm go away come back than go away again |
| spectacular hawk boy chapter 3 . 1/25/2010 thanks for the chapter it was intresting espeacily with rose getting to meet winry. |
| spectacular hawk boy chapter 2 . 1/25/2010 That was a great chapter i love the details and the adventure in it thanks for the chapter and i can't wait to read the next chapter-YOU ROCK! |
| Prieva chapter 1 . 11/9/2009 I know it's been two years since you wrote this piece, but I figured I would give you my two cents anyway. Personally, I thought this story had a lot of potential. I think you wrote it quite well. It flowed nicely, and you kept the characters in character. However, what you should work on for the future is sort of fleshing the plot out a bit. You make statements, and have significant plot points, but you don't always explain how or why (etc) they happened. Serious readers/writers question this, and it makes the story a little less believable. People can't always take things at face value; you have to learn to explain and justify why things happen. Other than that, I think it was a very entertaining read. Good luck with your future writings. |
| mercora2 chapter 12 . 9/29/2009 you must continue, i want more of this story... i got addicted on it |
| phobos chapter 12 . 9/25/2009 This story as great! Please, please write a different ending, so much needs to be explained that wasn't. For example, how did Ed escape the hommunculi, what did the hommunculi do with him, and how did Winry know about Ed being the philosopher's stone? |
| Ally010 chapter 1 . 8/27/2009 CONFUSED! okay so you said he got his arm and leg back so when wrath attacked how the hell did edward transform his automail into the sword thing! :S |