This was sooo sad! But sooo good!

Hey I'm karla I'm 12 years old I love the lion king I drive my mum crazy with the lion king I reallly love the way u mad ethe story in good deatailed and a goood. Simmiley lol I'm learning english is there a lion king 4 and can u make one about kopa who is simbas first son search it up if u don't know I reallly enjoyes ur story thanks bye oh and kovos cubs and make one about qqueen uru and king. Ahiadi thank you good bye

Goos story. I like this song, it's sad but you know the Pride Lands will get better.

TabbyBri

A great story. Very good.

It's been years since I've seen TLK but this was how I always pictured Nala's departure, even the part where Scar would try to make her his mate-and I never even saw the musical.

I really liked the way you portrayed Nala's thoughts and the use of lyrics. It was very depressing and realistic. This story does have more potential, but it's your decision. It's still great work.

That was great!

That was really really good. It was so sad!

cocorocks1

That's great. The movie never really shows what Nala's been through, but you've done it really well.

It was good! *claps* Sad, but good.

Beautiful!

and very well written!

I congratulate you!

It's kind of sad this is a oneshot. You describe the land very well, and how Serafina and Sarabi are weak. You also add emotion to how the land Nala stood on was her home, and that she had a connection to it.

.AWESOME!

i luv this so much, keep writin!

aly

Very nicely done.. really nice. I like it a lot, and, as the other reviewers said, it would be a very good idea to continue this. In any case, excellent job, keep it up!

*points to other reviewer* See, they think you should continue and so do I because I'm good like that...

I liked the way you added the emotions to the song and the dialogue was realistic. Descriptions of thingsmuch better than random other previous stories you've written.

Once again, CONTINUE POR FAVOR!

~DUL

Because you entered the scene while it was seemingly halfway through, people would have not seen the musical may be confused when they read it. But I have seen the musical, and aside from that, I think you did a very good job.

The way that you broke the song up and injected it into different parts of the story at regular intervals just gives it backing emotion, and anyone who's heard it for themselves will know that it's a very emotional song. Also, the character dialogue you provided us with is realistic, and the descriptive language you used is quite sophisticated, if I must say so myself.

You say that this is a one-shot. That somewhat disappoints me, because there's so much more that you could do with this story if you would just continue. And I do encourage you to continue, because you've given us a nice beginning to read, and it just doesn't seem complete, the way it is. So yes, please do continue writing this.

-Ochi