Oh wow. Talk about messed up. Either way, it was a very enjoyable read. You deserve every review and more! MORE!

i love it!

you made L look, sound and act really pathetic. like he got easily trapped into something and finds it hard to escape because he panics too much. maybe you made the fic a little too short so that there will be only ehough space for the wanted scene...

FLAME POWER!

PS

you did tell us to be honest,right?

sorry if i offended you, i only meant a little.

well that was really confusing!o.o

Smart.

Very smart.

And erotic.

Very very erotic.

:3

Raito is in love with his failure.

L is in love with his downfall.

And they are both in love with hate.

so twisted... it's absolutely hot!

Oh, loved the last three lines! Very sharp and poignant statements!

I LOVED it! It was very good. ^_^

Very well done; the style sort of feels like, at the section for the "M" rating, that one is reading through an amber tinted lens (or, maybe, a lemon-tinted one?); All in all, very nice work; the dialogue was a bit sparse, but at the times they did speak, it carried a lot of weight. Great job, here!

Take care,

~September's Nobara.

That...was one fantastic story. Loved every part of it! And the way you pulled it off... Bravo! Definitely a fave. ^-^ ~thumbs-up~

You're another girl who writes yaoi. Yours was better than many, but that doesn't make it 'good'. Was this supposed to be their first time? If so, that makes it worse. Second time?- Excellent. For this site.

Mello

This is very good! Somehow, the characters... acted like themselves, which is hard to do in a lemon for a yaoi-less series. And L calling him Kira at the end was a nice touch.

i liked it the ending was ok it could have been longer but i did like it maybe more detail and pronouns will make this story and A+ in my book but for now it's onlt a B

That's a good one. You should just have wrote a little more conversation before the kiss, I think. Thing happens too fast.

omg! the best pairing in death note ! kya~