This was a truly exceptional story! You captured everyone's emotional upheavals unbelievably well - it was almost as if you had been there, done that!

Incidentally, I can speak somewhat from a degree of experience regarding your descriptions, primarily regarding what it is like to suffer from such an illness. I experienced seven months of it first hand, and, believe me, it is exactly as described! My life is nowhere near as complicated or dangerous as that of an FBI agent, but I am certain your grasp of the illness combined with your study of the characters in the show, is what makes this such an evocative piece of fan fiction. Thank you for doing such a wonderful job on this!

Aww, such a beautiful end! Another really great story! Loved every bit of it.

You did a very good job with this, and I liked how you described Charlie's actions as those of a younger brother. Never thought about it before, but your exactly right. :)

Very good fic. You described Don's thinking with real talent and Alan and Charlie's react are totally according with their character in the show.

Thank you for this storie.

Haha at Don hit by the door. I know it’s mean, but I couldn’t help myself there. It actually happened to me on a few occasions Don working himself into exhaustion and experiencing something like a burn-out was interesting to read, just as his struggle to make the right decision and just to be able to think straight. All that stress, not feeling well, his job catching up with him and making him doubt everything was a little depressing, but still nice to read. Good work, I’d say, I enjoyed reading the story very much.

Nice plot. still some punctuation problems, but i know how hard it is to worry about those when you are in the thick of a good story. I like the ending, the mustard thing really ended it with a feeling of satisfaction.

KEEP WRITING, you have good style

and dae... out loud is two words, not one. I appreciate feedback but remember this is fanfiction, not a serious novel. My grammar and punctuation are never going to be perfect and I understand it can be frustrating for a reader but the point of posting is to:

a) share a story so others can enjoy reading what you enjoy reading

b) be fun

If I was going to spend a lot of time betaing etc then I would be writing original work, not fanfiction. I really did appreciate your feedback (this is a very old story for me and my first) but I did actually get the point first time, so the second review is a bit over the top. If it's too hard for you to read, don't continue, you don't have. I prefer to write in a more fluid manner, more like casual speech rather than hard and fast (and boring but clearly useful for ease of reading) rules of writing. I may ramble but that's just how I am and with this being fanfiction it's just a bit of fun so I'll save my proof reading for other stuff.

COMMAS!

sorry, but it really helps, it makes it less confusing and easier to read. Just get your friend to read it outloud, or even get a teacher (sorry, i know it's summer still) to read it and edit it!

PLEASE!

OK, it's an all right plot, but in chapter 3, have somebody read it to you. There is some punctuation problems, commas mostly.

I think this was a rather weak chapter (chapter 3), nothing big happens here, and it was rather boring to read.

by the way at the beginning it looks like you mean the husband is dead and Megan talked to him.

this was a lovely and thoroughly enjoyable story but I admit the ending left me a little flat. I did feel like the ending was a bit rushed, so it did feel a bit of an anticlimax. You had so much boiling under the surface, Charlie and Alan having their lives move on and Don feeling like he was being a burden. Having said that, I also feel you knew where you wanted the story to end and where you were taking it. It didn't end as a quick fix, but rather Don starting to recover and I liked that. So it was probably my desire for more of this story that left me feeling as I did. I would definitely have liked to have seen the issue of Don hiding such a potentially serious illness from Alan and Charlie dealt with more, especially their point of views, but all in all this was a thoroughly enjoyable ride full of Don angst:)

Thanks for the update. I really enjoyed it. I am glad that Don is finaly moving on and is willing to seek help. Doing that is hard, but it's worth it.

Poor Donnie. No matter what he goes through, somehow the most important thing is how it's affecting Charlie, not his own struggles or feelings. No wonder he keeps things to himself. I wonder if anyone ever asks Charlie if he realizes how what he does affects Don?

So glad to have an update. Very nice ending.

Not the end, is it? I really like the fic. Of course, the thing about depression is that often the first stage of recovery is the most dangerous...