that was deep and breathtaking

you took a usually overlooked character (chouji) and made this into something meaningful

:)

seriously you did an amazing job

Rather lovely, your portrayal of Chouji is gorgeous.

Hey,

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I like your little drabble. It short but theres quite a lot in it. Thers perhaps too much repatition of the word chouji but it has an effect nonetheless.

Could i maybe dabble in this, do a little drabble of the other team mates toughts in the same style? it has inspired me a little. good style.

Nice. The flow was good. I like how Chouji is portrayed.

SO Good! I love it! And I can see how this would fit with losers, and yet not fit. Bravo!

People underestimate Team Ten, especially poor Choji. He's so sensitive underneath that cuddly bilk of his. You really captured Team Ten's attitudes in this. Heck, you made ME hope!

Good job, and never forget to hope!

wow! This is amazing. A superb piece of writing, you really caught the essance of Choji, well done! x

That was great. I love it!

Keep writing stories, every word you write is another content person!

Nice. Choji is neither disconnected and brillant like Shikamaru nor loud and beautiful like Ino. He has more to lose. I like it.

I liked it. Chouji is... gah. Cheerfully, just HIM. :D

(As for concrit, I think it gets repetitive, especially in the second to last paragraph, and the sentence structure.)

Beautiful. And Choji's right: nothing should be taken for granted. That's quite a piece of wisdom, so thank you for sharing.

-Peace

-echolck

Well written. I liked how u put each person's way of thinking. It is the type of writing that makes a person think a little bit. Keep up the good work.