good story until you killed of miley. you shoukd redo it and have miley survive and add some more chapters

you killed my favourite character, Miley!

but seriously, you don't kill important characters, coz u made me cry! I'm serious =(

I actually teared up.

I'm such a sook.

=| I'm angry at myself :(

this story was great but i have to admit that it was soo close of making me cry.lol

okay, im like really confused. i thought you said that lilly was the one that had been ran over. okay im copying the key parts (for me) from last chapter.

'Lilly screamed at her, slamming the door in the face and locking it. To her surprise, her mum didn’t try to get in. Sighing deeply she collapsed onto her mattress, only to feel it deflate. Clenching her fists she ran out of her room, ignoring her mother’s calls and running into the busy streets of New York.'

at that point, Lilly, as you said, ran into the streets of new york. and at the next point,

'A cool wind swept over her and a shiver ran through her body. She crossed the street slowly, her mind pondering the day’s events. It was simple really, she wasn’t paying attention, anything could happen. She had only just noticed it was raining. Zipping up her sweater a little higher she sighed again, shuffling her feet in the already deep puddles. She felt a small vibration against her pocket and pulled out her cell phone. It was her.'

it was given the impression (for me) that it was out in the city with Lilly. and so when you got here,

'Her eyes widened as she saw it. A car. It was simple really; she didn’t expect it to hurt so much. As the truck slammed her body and she flew back, unconscious before she even hit the store window. Surprisingly her delicate body broke the glass, probably from the impact of the truck then anything else. Glass shattered and flew back as she skidded across the floor of the little Café.'

I was thinking there was a truck driver, and they had ran into Lilly, not Miley.

And then with the last line I had been confused because it gave me the impression that someone she knew was in new york with her. and then in this chapter it was told it was miley. and now, im REALLY confused. And i' aware that you're already through with the story, but if you could explain that, that would be great.

Also, when you're switching back and forth and to different places, could you at least show or tell us where they are at, because I've gotten lost at other times, but I tended to pick it up before too long. It's just weird when you switch and I don't know what you're talking about at some points.

AH I HATE YOU FOR KILLING MIELY! oaky.. i really dont but.. yeah. XD

aw

NO, not miley!

WHOAA drama!

YAY! Sequel!

omg i cried so hard while reading this story! its so sad! i loved it tho! ur an awesome writer!

omg! how could u write this? im crying so hard!:( Cassy

Okay, so I never got the chance to review this story so I'm doing it now.

It was totally amazing and the ending really got to me. :)

hey great story, just read that one and the first. great job..

XD jamie

omg, this story totally made me cry. it was sad, but good, but i still didn't like the fact that it made me cry!

Well, as this review, I will write what i thoought..If ou know, (I justs fond out today) they say that Lilly's mom is going to be in the story. I know u don't mean for her to be meamn, but in the pic, lily's mom dressed up like Lola! (leggings , pink wig and all...

and next:

NO NO

NNO!

MILEY CANNOT BE DEAD! NO

wow, I feel like cring. Sorry, i need a moment