So.. first review in 8 years I suppose? Not bad, but a little overdramatic. The 17 and 18 of this timeline never hated all humans, and I'm not sure 18 really thought of Krillin that way. It's honestly hard to imagine women lusting after Krillin to the point that he takes precedence over their twin brother. 18 fell for his kindness, and the fact that he was the very first who treated her like a human (other than her own brother).

Nice. Really sad.

I thought it was very well written and in character But I think 18 was kind of mean when she was talking about her I mean ther still siblings. and she should think about how this is affecting 17 because while she has someone. he is left with no one. but overall it was very good and i think you should write one for 17 and how he feels about all this.

This is a well written story and all, but I'm not a fan of #17 bashing. D

aww so sad, this was beautifully written, and i really enjoyed reading it. the phrasing seemed very 18ish and summed up her character change perfectly. truly wonderful story

smiles

brenthforever

X3 I think this was an excellent description of the jealousy and hurt that occurred between these two at that point in their lives. It's very real and well expressed. I love it.

im really sorry about what happened i thought that you would have been happy that i reposted it. i wasnt trying to make it seem like my story.i feel really bad and i hope that youll forgive me.

Nice work, Kap.

I realized that I have read this story many times and never reviewed it. I'm sorry. So here is my review.

Very emotional and passionate, plus excellent use of the word "doppelgänger." As an english major, I am a girl who appreciates a large vocabulary, so kudos. Also, I really like that you cut the sugary crap around this whole 17/18/Krillin relationship. People are usually very inarticulate about expressing this relationship, but you nailed it! Nice work.

-Ainmosni-

Oh and p.s., Part 8 of Only Evil in Bad Lighting is on its way soon, I promise...

Course I understand! In fact, a lot of that kinda reminds me of me and my sister. We had each other forever so we never really thought we'd need anyone else...but then...well, lets just say I was 18 in that story. Still, due to us having to live together it didn't get to the point where my sis just left. However, she did (like 17) have a problem with growing up. Nice work, I enjoyed this! With today's media of course everyone's mind automatically thinks 'it's sex'. Sigh...people. It's times like this I feel slightly ashamed to be a human. -_-;

Wowza, that was really deep.

Not bad. Not bad at all! Seriously, this was really good.

If I could change only one thing, though, it would be the fact that you failed to address Krillin's appearance. Frankly, I think that would disgust 17 more so than the fact that he's human. Human is bad enough, but an UGLY one? At least to the shallow person's eye.

Good job! Heck, you hardly need a beta! Though if you feel you absolutely HAVE to have one, I still offer my services for the times in which your beta 'steps out'. Don't worry, I'll gladly turn the reigns back over to her when she 'returns'. But still, I doubt you really HAVE to have one! Great job!