This was really great. But, not a good way to come to a conclusion for Josh and Beth. She was exhausted and disheveled when Mick St. John brought her to her apartment - surely Josh would be upset for her and at one point need a few answers for what had happened to her.

Note: I never got the impression that Josh and Beth lived together. It was Beth's apartment that you saw them in during the run of the TV show. Somehow, I was left with the understanding that Josh had his own apartment/condo/house?

But all in all a great story line.

My hands are clapping - they really are. You wrote this story line so very well. And the part about Coraline trying to make a world for Mick - her strange fascination and love for him.

You tied up the storyline quite well. Josh Lindley is still alive and Beth Turner as his girlfriend. Mick St. John understands the connection to Beth far better than she does.

Loved this - I really did.

Excellent writing - my hands are clapping. And, I had a feeling that Richard was a Vampire - something that was a name that Mick St. John could not place.

You have not missed a beat and this is a good storyline.

Fantastic writing on this storyline! My hands are clapping.

Very well written story line - but, please, not my wonderful Mick St. John!

Oh - one thing - Alex O'Loughlin's eyes are hazel (a brown with green) that means that Mick's eyes are hazel. Just a little quibbling.

So far so good. Methinks Josef will get him out of this jam and possibly with Beth Turner's help.

I finally found this story and read it from beginning to end in one go. I love how complex it is, the case, the MickBeth dynamic, the BethJosh problem, the JosefMick friendship in a test, the big reveal that Coraline orchestrated it all. The slayers and their sarcastic wit, and Richard who reminds me of the Joker in a way, a mirror image of snarky Josef, with more malice. This story gave me goosebumps, in a good way. Deliciously noir and still stylish. Thank you!

ok ...nice story so far.

Update soon!

Cheers

That was a good story! True to the show. I hope to see more of your work!

Wow! Nice! Fall in love with this show a couple of days ago, and this fic is perfect!

Please tall me you are writing more!

Feedback is: 'well deserved' in this case! That is to say, positive feedback. Though there were turns of phrase that caused me to check myself (artful, but hard to follow) the overall effect is magnificent!

'Think about it, man. She falls in love with something you're supposed to pick out of your teeth.' Dear God, what a sentiment! Humorous & yet highly offensive; a blow to human pride but a light one! I could so see Josef saying that in his cool, offhanded way & I felt the indignity boil in my chest at the same moment I saw his point. Masterfully done!

Excellent characterization as well. The contrast between Mick & Josef is clear, yet both their standpoints are equally well established. Beth is her usual aggressive self, but oblivious to the finer nuances. It's the way fiction should be written; clean & yet unmistakable. Only 10 hits? Seriously girl, your talent is much underappreciated!

Thank you for the lovely read!

- Diana

You kept the characters in-character through the whole story. Interesting plot. Great story.

By the way- oddly enough, some woman who looks unbelieveably like Coraline is supposed to be on the show Friday night...back from the dead or strange coincidence?

Anyway, great story. Would love to see more Moonlight fics from you.

Yes, Please, MORE! In other words, I liked it and I want you to please continue.

I love it! :]

Wow! And seriously, WOW! There's not much more I can express than that. I agree that critical reviews can be best for growth, but there is little I'd change about this story. It's exceptionally well written, has a dark etherial feeling that gels well with the show & draws the reader in almost instantly. I was piqued & amused by the veiled reference to 'Buffy' & found myself unable to put it down after that.

I didn't trust Richard almost instantly! He was too smooth, charming & tho his run-on sentences reminded me of 'Marshall' off Alias (which amuses me since Marshall has made a few guest appearances on Moonlight now as the photographer), it took me a chapter to warm up to him. Therefore I was NOT surprised when he turned out to be allied with the vampires - but the very end caught me! Nice twist! Coraline - so wasn't expecting THAT! But nicely handled - all the emotion was gut-twisting & Josef's role in the affair shocked me! And heaven help me, but I LIKED Sylvia! I didn't like the way she stabbed Mick mind you, but her whole speech about not being an extra in a vampire soap, then shooting someone - that was CLASSIC! *LOL!*

Incidentally, I think your nightclub name is 'genius' - what a clever idea, tho I'd never caught the reference. And I can't wait for the epilogue. Really, really nice work.

- Diana

I just started surfing for Moonlight fics today, and this was a delicious find. I like the mix of romantic chemistry and vamp politics ~ good case file feeling in tune with the actual show. I hope you'll keep writing in the fandom!