This was great!

I felt really touched by Mikami's fate and found your portrayal of the various characters in the story very convincing. I especially liked Gevanni, though he has but a small role.

Thanks for sharing! :)

Oh, it was so good...first I was a little bit afraid of Mikami with Matt, but you wrote it so beautifully! Matt was in character all the time! Wow, that's something I haven't seen yet! :)

And Mikami was great too (although he freaks me out with his attitude). And it wasn't yaoi, which is great too.

Uhm...yeah, I really liked this although the ending wasn't that good. (or maybe I just did want it to continue badly :)

Good job.

Introspective, though very angsty. I love it.

Ahh, this is fantastic. I love your writing style: little observations and breaks and, I don't know, it seems very true to the way people actually think. Jumping around. Good pacing, lovely little glimpses into people's characters. Realistic conversations, too, in that detached brief way people speak when their minds are somewhere else, or when there's no way to say everything they're thinking or feeling.

I loved this, too: The kanji’s a big black swoop in Matt’s mind for a second as he translates—like the blood of a cockroach smeared on a bathroom wall and—

Also, thanks for putting these two together, even briefly. :D

*fangirls terribly*

I just want you to know that... Even though these are my last few days in London and I'm running around like mad trying to get things done (and not reviewing the way that I should), you are AWESOME. You take my breath away with the suspense and your writing style and phrases like THIS: "The craving’s been tracing the veins in his forehead with a scalpel for the past three hours." GAH. Just... AUGH. Cannot take it. It's just too good. :P

For some constructive crit, though... I'd say that before Mikami shows up, you spend an awful lot of time inside Matt's head, and you forget to tell us what he's actually DOING in the cell. I mean, even if there isn't much to do in there... the bit where you mentioned him wiping his face and talking to the bathroom sink... that was good. More of that might benefit your piece a little.

But really, it's all good. I is speechless yet again.

eally liked this. yeah, there were places i thought you could have spent a bit more time on, teasing the story out, but this was really good anyway-i mean, the shock of mikami dying and matt knowing it was near, knowing that mikami (even though he was broken and clinging on to the dregs of his life calling matt a criminal with disdain and still trying to fit everything into his black and white world) wouldn't kill himself (or maybe he would, maybe you were trying to leave that as vague as the series) and everything kind of just stops, for a second, and matt is on a plane back to the us and kind of feels a bit lost, a bit pathetic, and still hates near (now l) because he cheated and mello is dead and he's alive and he's not sure what to think about this.

lovely. good job!

Way good! You took one of the most unlikely character meetings/pairings I could ever think of and made it WORK not only made it work but made it GOOD, made it deep, made it ... i dunno. I loved it though. That bitter sortof survival that matt has... (sigh) wonderful, and i'm at a loss for words beyond that.

...I love your writing so much. Mikami and Matt? There's a duo I haven't read about it, not that I've been looking. You really nailed Mikami, I think, and of course you wrote Matt just as brilliant as always...though I have to admit, Matt outliving Mello makes me really, really depressed. But still, this was awesome.

God, I just LOVE how you portray Matt. It was an excellent story. So, you also think that Near wrote in the Death Note. I share that opinion.

Your characterization of Mikami was perfect. I've been wanting to read fic about his time in prison - adding Matt made it even better.

Awesome fic.

wow. poor Mikami. doubly poor Matt. that was really good, the perfect amount of depressing.

Judi

Wow...Matt/Mikami never thought about it...

That was a really nice read, and definitely worth it. I believe you captured Matt's Character very well, and did a great job with Mikami. I look forward to anything you do in the future with these two, and I thank you again for the wonderful read.