So far i like where the story is going..just wish u would update :)

omg i totally agree i hate when people say they hate my stories its like if you dint like them than dont read them

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um.. look, meastragirl wasn't trying to be mean to you or pick on you she was just being a really good critic as said on review box below (It is extremely helpful to use this opportunity to comment on an aspect of the story that can be improved. A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding tool for the writer.) by trying to help you better your writing skills even if its not what it seems. with any ones writing theres both sides of reviews but u learn from them and suck it up not cry over it and write a whole chapter yelling at the person.

awsome are you going to put the next chapter up soon cause you did great on the first real chapter so plzplzplzplzplzplz put

the next one up!awsome job!-iluvbubbles13

plz update soon

cant wait for the next one nd i dont think there were ne problems with your storys

TOTALLY! We make lots of mistakes! But at least we try! Lol! UPDATE!

Yeah just listen to the Hannah Montana song, Cuz everbody makes mistakes everbody has those days everbody knows what im talking bout everbody gets that way, lol dont listen to what that person said, your story is great! and they are just trying to cause trouble!

Don't listen to that Maestra Bitch. I'm going to report her review for abuse or something. I really like your story and this is good for a first time!

xx,

EMily

My oh my...

Your story, quite simply, could be improved. Right now, it doesn't even feel like a story. You switch points of view left and right. At least try and stick to one point of view per chapter. Switching is somewhat bearable when it within between first person, but first and third don't mix.

Lilly is no less important than anyone else. Try capitilizing her name. And the beginning of every other sentence. I would recommend a Beta.

YOUR OVERUSE OF CAPS LOCK AND END PUNCTUATION IS DRIVING ME INSANE! One exclamation point will get your point across. And! not! every! sentence! needs! to? end? with! one? You can use periods too. Please do.

Finally, it doesn't sound like a story. Miley is kind of like "Our brothers died. I'm sad." Show us some real emotion! Miley curling up into an emo bubble and having flashbacks doesn't really add much. You need description, show us what's happening. The entire thing seemed overly rushed and this one chapter could have been stretched to over 3,0 words.

Hope this helps.

-Maestra

OMJ! SO SAD ABOUT THE BROTHERS! And the neighbors! YAY! UPDATE!

i hope you update soon

sounds good. update asap please

Oh This could be good! Kevin liking Miley would be kinda weird because of the age differenc! You should also make Kevin get a girlfriend sometime in it! But she shouldnt be famous. If there was more famous ppl I think that it wouldnt be as good... But you could always just make up a character... Named Kelsy... Lol Jking unless you want to cuz that would be totally amazing! Well Make and update soon! I'll be waiting for it!