You are right in that this fanfic isn't that good, but I think you should be proud of it anyways, not because it's a great fanfic, but because it's your second fanfic ever, you get better by practice after all, so the fact that you could write something, that's a lot of people consider worth reading on your second attempt, shows that you are a talented writer, of course your later fics are better than this one, but you should be proud of this anyways, because the reasons your later fanfics are better, is that you saw what you did wrong in this fanfic, and fixed it for the next one, and that's the mark of a good author(or artist in general) the ability to see what you did poorly and doing it better next time, so I would say tumbs up for this fanfic, it was fun to read, and reading it after reading a lot of your newer fanfics, really show how you have improved as an author, continue getting better like that, and if you can create an original story, I believe you could get it published.

I must agree with your post in the first chapter that you have become a better writer than when you wrote this, but it's still a good story for all that you are writing better stories now, I particularly like the fact that Ryoga is not at all suspicious, about meeting 3 cousins randomly in an alley he never heard about before, it's a nice way to demonstrate that the whole family is always lost, and so meeting relatives you don't know about in random places, is not at all weird.

In your defence.
There are worse fics on this site.
With butchering of characterization so bad that being flayed and dropped in a salt factory is not enough of a punishment.
Thank you for writing and posting this.
It was readable..

ish

Mistake
Ranma tells Mimi (I know not correct spelling but forget name) that she should ask Rick out then when she tells Ranma she did as she said he's surprised & says "Isn't it supposed to go the other way around?"

Ranma should have mixed Waterproof soap before hitting Lang with the water

ERROR...ERROR...it's Baku Tenkensai that was used for mining not the Shi Shi Hokodan the Shi Shi Hokodan is a suicide move each time the user uses it they are wishing for death & that it will kill them

Ranma should have the black armband (maybe with Hiroshi's initials) on one of his arms

Not bad at all.I have no idea why you think that your story was so bad.?

good story ne

It was a good story, wasn't aware of it until I end finding a site covering stories about Ranma-chan. You could put this story under the Ranma / Robotech crossover category.

Amazing story and incredible job on the crossover!

great story! i enjoyed reading it took me 2 days to do so but was worth every minute i was reading lol

Okay, you're right, this is pretty bad. The other annoying thing that I found is you kept spelling Minmei's surname Lin, it's Lynn Minmei. But, I have to admit, it was so bad it was fun! Kinda like the movie "Mars Attacks!" You're comments at the beginning of each chapter were almost as entertaining as the story itself. I'm going on to the sequel to see what's improved!

Took me 3 tries to get pass the clumsy writing (which you criticized yourself enough already) and 1 more once I realized this is a Robotech crossover, not Macross (I'm Asian, so I'm a bit bias against Robotech).

Still, now that I finished it, I can see why people liked it. The events in this story were entertaining, and mixed action with humor well enough. The descriptions seems somewhat glossed over, but the constant 'actions' help distracting a reader's attention toward that.

A bit lacking in character growth in the part of Ranma, but we got a right amount of exposition and comedic antic, so it's easy to ignore.

And finally, hatta say, I really like the scene where Ranma sing White Reflection.

You know what? I don't care if you do think it sucked and was horribly derivative. I've never read any other Ranma/Macross crossovers before so I really thought that this one was quite good. So there.

Oh, and as for the thing with Akane? I think she probably was just too depressed to put up enough fight to stop the wedding. This fic is about Ranma on SDF anyhow, who cares why she was taken out of the picture?

As a final note: Yeah, there were spelling errors, there were grammar errors. I can tell the thing is not up to your usual level of quality, but it's still great.

Just reread this from where I last read (Chapters 1 through 6) all the way through. I have to say it was highly entertaining. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Honest. "Warts" and all. ::chuckles:: Thanks for sharing.