I think it was pretty spot on except the last part.
I always suspected Itachi of sending hints to Jiraiya all the time.

A completely brilliant little snippet.

Sad, to think Jiraiya could have had the clues and ignored them because Orichimaru's betrayal cost him his faith in his own judgment. Thanks for sharing

Aww this is so cute! I hope you continue with it sometime. Just one more snippet!

Nice

This is a good and interseting one shot.

This was a pretty good read, esp. for something so short. Your characterization of Itachi is a little hard to believe (he doesn't seem nearly as confident as someone in his position, even as a child would be). On the other hand, Jiraiya is on the mark.

I liked it. It's completely possible and doesn't mess with the timeline. You should write more about Jiraiya's interactions with other characters like this.

Oh! Jiraiya love! *om nom nom nom nom nom*

*happy!*

Nice characterization here, methinks yo've got Jiraiya down pat. And very nice plot-bunny, I can perfectly see things happen this way.

My heart swelled at the pocky bit. That was excellent. I mean, in one sentence, you managed to turn Itachi alive.

*bows* masterly...

The Japanese nipicker in me just wants to let you know that 'Toad sEnnin' would sound better, sannin being ' the 3'.

And it's 'genjutsu'. Yes, I know, Japanese is nasty ;3

Interesting. Will there ever be a sequel? I wonder what their thoughts were as they died. Did they feel they failed each other? Thank you for sharing.

Nice oneshot :) You wrote that 'connection' between the uchiha brat and Jiraiya very well. I liked little Itashi :)

I really like how you wrote this! It feels like this could have even happened in the actual anime!

Oh wow - great job of insight into both their characters through a few brief meetings. Loved Jiraiya's explanations of his priorities as to who he would protect and why.