Is this finished? If it is you might want to mark it as such. Otherwise it was a very poignant story; you do such an incredible job at packing a great deal of emotion, story, and atmosphere into such a small word count.

I don't find too many good Viktor/Harry's so...good job :)

Nice.

*sigh* that was so sweet! _ Nice work!

cute there really isn't any other way to describe it

From the wikipedia article: Drabble

"A drabble is an extremely short work of fiction exactly one hundred words in length, although the term is often incorrectly used to indicate a short story of fewer than 10 words. The purpose of the drabble is brevity and to test the author's ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space."

Word count: 199

Status: Unsuccesful.

I really like it, but my favorite line was the first one. I love the comparison.

I tried to read this yesterday, but stupid said that it didn't exist. XD

Anyway, I really like Viktor/Harry stories, and this one is especially interesting to me. You did a good job, and the imagery was awesome!

One thing: A small shift of weight had 'me' looking... is what I think you meant.

-Kay

Oh wow that's absolutely gorgeous and so sad. Well written, the emotions were so real. Great drabble.

For further writing, you may be interested in this site:

w w w . geocities sapienti_university_of_magic (without the spaces)

It's a role playing site based on the Harry Potter world.

Either way, good luck with your writing and I look forward to reading more.

Melora Brockert, SUM student

nice. It's Victor/Harry...It could never be bad!

loved it!