This is really good

Oh my goodness, I love your writing style! .

I love your stories! They're so creative, and your A/H interaction is the best. (But does Opal need to escape, every time? Couldn't they keep her once? Just once? XD) Now I'll need to read TLG before I can read the rest of your works ;)

Breathtaking ensemble of Artemis' most guilty moments. But it's Holly - if there's anyone who can handle him at his worst, it's her.

WAIT WHAT HAPPENED WHAT

I really like this Opal, and how much she's managed to unearth about Artemis. Also, you've got her voice down pat - like all the other characters

One of my most favorite chapters so far. The Mud Man song was genius - it should be in canon! - and Foaly's horrified realization was really well-paced. Fentanyl gas? Very interesting. I have some experience with anesthetics/analgesics but haven't yet heard of fentanyl being used for such a purpose; has it been done by the military? Just curious.

When those two came on I was looking for Spiro - and he was there! You brilliant, brilliant creature you. We see so much of Opal but not enough of these guys. So happy they're here again. It's like a villain reunion! Amazing :,D

Oh god, this is going to cost her her job. Not that it matters when compared to Artemis' brothers. Awesome. Why didn't she at least tell Butler? I understand not making Angeline worry, but Butler... he could've gotten himself up there, and would have been a great help.

Whoa whoa whoa, Argon! Is there no doctor-patient confidentiality here, that he's just spewing out Artemis' status to the public? Deplorable.

D'aaaaaaaaaw. This is awesome.

You have a gift for writing Artemis/Holly. And the rest of the characters and some plots that feel pretty close to canon plots. Well done.

Another good chapter.

And yay for number 1, love seeing the little guy once in a while. And Foaly has not tact.

Good mental scenes here. Many people fail at this sort of thing, but you keep a pretty good dream-like style here.

That name just keeps cropping up in your stories. Kinda funny to see that he is a constant. Stonecrop.

Man, it just hit me, Foaly is wildly unprofessional. It seems in character and I'm pretty sure he did something similar in the books, but still, wow.

Good story though.

Chapter Four: Grand Theft Aerial. I died. Five minutes after I was like ''And it works too !'' then died again. Good story gonna keep reading.