Do people keep forgetting Charlie IS a civilian, not an agent. That was a chargeable offence. And the leaders lack of concern was horrifying. I'd hate to think what Don would actually do to him. Nice work!

Good story. :)

great story, love it!

I just plain LOVE your writing!

GreAt story would have made a great episode

This is one of my favorite stories of yours. So in character. So incredibly written. I'm not one for OC's but yours is just good OC's. I wish this can be turned into an actual episode. I'll just have to stick with your amazing writing and my imagination.

Of course, you got me with Don going big brother and leader of the agents... and I love the way how you describe Charlie fighting back. Realistic. You don't overkill - which I really appreciate.

It's also great how Don told Grace to get in touch with her brother again, and just allowing to see a part of him that he rarely lets anyone see. It's so touching that she was able to get in touch with Trevor and that they were able to connect.

I can go on just about how awesome your story is, but it won't be enough.

Thanks for writing this!

Awesome! '

This was exceptionally well written - filled with emotion and intensity. I could easily visualize Don Eppes tensing his jaw and fighting to remain calm and professional, in control. Your description of what was going through Charlie's mind just before, and during, the assault, was quite moving and I felt his fear!

Loved it! Great story! I, for some strange reason, love the dynamic of having brothers in dangerous situations! Gives the show/story drama without it being dumb "love triangle" drama!

Anyways! Very well written! Good job!

-B

Awesome story - loved your rookie - Grace under fire, to be sure. And Don was spot on - exuding leadership and pushing his rookie to learn, even in a situation that was the ultimate distraction.

just for future reference, any concussion that leads to unconsciousness is considered a grade 3 concussion no matter how short the time they are unconscious.

Nice job! I enjoyed this fic, and I liked the OC, which is REALLY REALLY REALLY rare for me! Good job!

That's some amazing writing skills you've got there! I love how you illustrated Don and Charlie's characters and closeness through the eyes of someone else. Really enjoyed it!

1 word WOW and I NEED MORE...

Oh man this was so good :) This should have been called baptized under the wrath of a pissed off brother rotfl :) This was really good, hard ass Don Charlie whumpbrother fluff ;) all the ingredients of a great story ;)