This story is definitely one of my favorite from the Jak and Daxter fanfiction website. It is so well writtenand there are no grammatical errors. The story flows beautifully and everything is much more realistic than the games. I love how you pretty much rewrote Jak II, but it ended up pretty much the same way. Thank you for sharing your creativity with everyone!

You got me stressed out in this chapter! It was a really great way to describe the final battle!

Awwwwwwwww! I’ve never stopped believing in Jak and Keira! They were both meant for each other no matter what happened in the games. Loved the chapter!

Another wonderful chappie! Torn and Ashelin make a great couple and I’ve always shipped them!

Oh boy, shit’s going down. There is so much more emotions in this storyand it is truly fantastic! I believe the final fight is about to go down and I can’t wait to see what happens after!

I think it was a brilliant idea to bring back eco channeling. It was such a fun thing in the first game that they got rid of in the others. I can understand how we only see Jinxin the third games. Everything is making so much sense with the game and it is truly fantastic!

Wow, things are not going well for our heroes! I’m glad Tess is going to be fin, but I hope Damas and Kleiver will be too!

Well done, Torn, well done. I hope Tess is going to be alright! Daxter would be devastated otherwise. Great chapter and I love hpw much action there is! It really reminds me of the game with a much more realist touch!

Another great chapter my friend! I feel bad that Kor got the kid, but I knew it was inevitable to keep the timeline of the games! That was fantastic work!

The irony in this chapter is pulsing! I love how Jak and Damas bonded and immediately got along! I can see now how the story is going to lead to the final fight of the second game. This story is incredibly amazing so far!

Ashelin, Ashelin, Ashelin, you were manipulated my friend! Wow! That was an action-packed chapter and it was wonderful! I wonder how Jak and Damas are going to find out about each other, or if they will!

Wow, that scene was much more intense than the game and I found absolutely thrilling! I love all the confusion! :D

Father and son reunited! I love it. Although, this changes the entire timeline of the games. I loved this chapter!

I think Praxis recognized something in Jak and that is why he acted weirdly. I loved this chapter and this story is great so far!

I just occured to me that Mar is the only child you see in the games, that I can think off anyway! I loved the chapter and I love the twist you added. I can’t wait to see how Jak is going to evade prison!