Connor: I one the bet MWAHAHAHA!

Ronnoc: (In Pink dress) SHUT UP.

Connor: At least I'm not wearing a dress.

Ronnoc: I swear I will knock your lights out.

the gopher is hillarious. I really wish I could write a scene like that.

I'm sad to see this story end. But man it's been an emotional ride. I cried a bit with the whole adopting of May. Such a sweet, tender moment. Loved this story!

lol, wow, that's crazy.
Volume One? What's gonna be volume 2 (plot wise). aren't all the enemies beaten? Or is a Money in the Bank winner going to come in when Jack least expects it, cash in the brief case on him, and win Jack's farm, wife, and daughters? Then Jack has to get back into shape so he can win it all back?

Nice Freddy Kruger reference...
...fitting for the entity that is Ace.
*evil grin* I can't think of a better divine punishment/reward for Ace, Aaron, Jim and Butch.

Can't wait for volume two!
*keeps story on watch list*

Huh, that went better than expected. Is this the last chapter and is the story ending? Or is there going to be one more hurdle?

Moving you off that rebar was touch - should be tough (or touch and go?)

You weight one hundred and seventy pounds - should be weigh

Good chapter btw.

Wheres May and Stu in this chapter? Didn't May live with Jack and Popuri?

don't know if that last part was the ending and if it was best darn ending i have ever read in my opinion hope you keep up the good work

Wow... what a pair of chapters. The wedding chapter was sweet and cute, though I'm upset that you didn't use my idea with The Rock. I also found the scene with May getting adopted kind of creepy. Not because it was a bad idea (it wasn't. It makes a lot of sense) but because telling her that she had to call them mommy and daddy... something about that seemed creepy to me. Not that I'd have a problem with her using those words, but telling an adopted to say that seems... weird to me. Then again, I've never been adopted, so I wouldn't know. It was still a good chapter though, Props on the happy ever after? NOPE!

This chapter was nothing short of intense. I predicted that Cleaver would join the dark side after getting his history in the last chapter and the Polaroid describing a big man holding Popuri hostage (also, for some strange reason, I picture him looking like Ryback... despite the fact that you said he has a ponytail). The fight scene was done well, and when you said the bell was bonging, I was kinda hoping that the Undertaker would show up and kick ass for no explained reason :)
But now, they're all dead, including the girls? What's going to happen in the next chapter? And don't tell me "THE END?", because I need, no, demand closure!

Quick typos: you write "chest" as "cheat" and you call Butch "Allan" at one point.

Great work.

(Talk about a "Niagra Falls" moment.)

Can I say anything that I already haven't said. As always such a beautiful chapter. Real tangible emotions to be felt, with every line. Pacing is perfect as always. Pretty sure I felt my heart skip a beat when Jack showed up at the festival. I am so absolutely in love with this story! Beautiful!

Aww, everything is coming together, and everybody is getting their happy ending... I assume that Jack's old boss is going to somehow get involved for some last minute conflict?
I felt the thing with Mary and rick came out of nowhere (I wish there was a bit more hinting towards that, though the two men thing makes sense now.) Still, nice work, and can't wait for the ending.

Once again beautifully written chapter. I love how it ended. I really didn't like the idea of Popuri at first, but I love your version of Popuri. Can't wait to see more.

"Are you sure you wouldn't just put the title on you?"

Jack shook his head, "No, I've had my moment in the spotlight."

If only the Rock and Hulk Hogan could see it that way...

anyway, cliff hanger chapter. I still wouldn't be surprised if the ending isn't a completely happy one. Wondering what goes on next.

Wow... Jack has completely let go of Ace and putting all his money into this town.. I'm wondering if be will ever get to a point where he worries about the money in his account dwindling... I couldn't even imagine how much he could be spending on everything right now.

As for his love life, I guess I wouldn't be surprised if he doesn't end up with anyone... But I think Popuri will think it over and give him a chance, especially since this time she will actually get a commitment and not just the occasional hang out with a kiss on the cheek :)

I can't wait to see what's next !