Really need to fix the grammar of this story. This was by far the chapter with most mistakes.

This story started good, well it's still so-so, but the humor got a bit much for trying to take this story seriously

Good idea. Give a dumbledore supporter who’s known to use potions access to a kitchen at a huge restaurant lol

I expected more hope/fleur time. At this point it’s like fleur isn’t even in the story

This is just horribly lazy writing.

Bashing Fucking overdone and lazy as hell.

Harry? This Harry is just a punk ass shit that isn't relateable to anyone but a douche bag.

What's the point of this story? We've seen Dumbledore and Ron bashing a thousands times before. It was before before, it's bad now.

Harry isn't even likable. He disrespects everyone without tits both to their faces in in his mind. There's no conceivable reason to bash Olivander, and yet you still do.

There's no tension, no plot, no mystery, and you've flattened the characters - What's left to enjoy?

Hahahaha, no. I'm done with this story. I can just feel how it'll get worse as it progresses. Harry saving all french girls from rape? Really? This whole thing works as a cheap plot device. Though it's worth mentioning I'm more pissed off the Bulgarians are used as a scapegoat as a Bulgarian myself. Also work on your writting. Get a wider vocabulary, or if you have one, start using one.

Also a random prediction, Harry will reveal himself (herself?) to be a female and suddenly every female will be bi, right?

If you ever rewrite or do a different story from chapter 10.5 onwards id be stoked to read it! Gender switches were never my favs, although this is the best one ive read so far. I absolutley loved the first 10.5 chapters.

F**k off.

I think I'm out... I do read gender bent stories from time to time (although I do prefer explicit warning), but there is just too much AU in this story with no background for the reader. From reading other reviews it's obvious that you changed the timeline (and a lot more, besides), but with the lack of knowledge provided to your readers, this is coming across as crack and being, with not so much out as random scenes stick together.

Technically, your writing is decent, although there are frequent cars where the wrong word is used. In the early chapters the story almost became a stream of consciousness a few times, but that seems to have been corrected in the latter chapters.

I wish you luck in your future writing, but I'll step out of this one. Thanks.

I give up. I get that the secret is probably a gender bend. not my cup of tea so I will drop this here before I get too far in.
Not a flame as it looks like people that are into this genre enjoy this a lot.
All the best.

i gave it a shot, but your style of writing is just not for me.

Okay, the first chapter seems a bit rambling and log winded. It lacks structure and seems to go everywhere.

A good word to use instead if study-holic: epistemophiliac

Epistemophiliac: One who is Driven to Learn
Epistemophilia: The love of knowledge or the compulsion to inquire into things by seeking more and more information about certain subjects of interest; an abnormal preoccupation with knowledge and learning; love of knowledge; specifically : excessive striving for or preoccupation with knowledge.

It's really not fair.

A long fem-Harry/Fleur fanfic... and it's a steaming pile of shit. I was SO looking forward to this being good.

The best thing can say about this is maybe someone will be inspired by you to do this same pairing, but do it better.

I'm a big fan of your story; been reading it since September of 2012. I can say that I don't normally do this, but you need a beta and I will illustrate why with a single repeated spelling error.

The word you've been using:
ac·cep·ta·tion
ˌaksepˈtāSH(ə)n/
noun
noun: acceptation; plural noun: acceptations; noun: common acceptation; plural noun: common acceptations

a particular sense or the generally recognized meaning ( common acceptation ) of a word or phrase.

The word you should be using:
ex·cep·tion
ikˈsepSH(ə)n/
noun
noun: exception; plural noun: exceptions

a person or thing that is excluded from a general statement or does not follow a rule.

Please, a single experienced Beta Reader could solve problems like this for you with very little trouble. Your story is good, but it could be great if you got the minor errors looked at by a second pair of eyes.

Always looking forward to more,
BabLe7

Good ending and thanks!

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