Ho boy! This fuckin story, man. Goddamn.
Just keep it coming, dude! I'll try and offer critical feedback where I can, but so far I can't really think of much. You've taken a very loose interpretation on characters we don't really see that much, so just stay consistent.

I like the religious tone.

oh my god, I've just left wanting more!
I hope you can continue soon, and it'll be here waiting for the next, as well as I expected this!
I really like the way you narrate, it's like me to get on stage, definitely, I like!

(*w*)

I love this.
I really, really do.
There aren't enough words for how deeply you've drawn me into this story. I'm so excited for the next chapter, and hopefully more of them after that.
Perfectly detailed in every way; I could play out every single thing inside my head,
Again, excited for more.

woow! ... seriously, I love ... I love this fanfic!
I love the way in which narrate the history and description of how they are perfect and Jimmy Edgar.
Also, I felt bad about how they treated Edgar, more than anything even I felt sorry that would oblige them to give a public apology for something very natural, they want him to humiliate :/
I am following your story and I hope the next chapter

Bye

(Big huge review coming, sorry for that! I had to cram in thoughts from three chapters. I actually read this on Tumblr so that I could have your beautiful art to go along with it, but I figured it would be easier to post a review on FFN, which I hope is cool? Loved that drawing where Jimmy's all grinning like a smartass while Edgar blocks the door and looks totally exasperated; total essence of the relationship right there and I loved it so hard.)

I really like the way you're writing this. It has a lot of ambiance to it and it goes really well with the accompanying artwork. Usually I like it better if stories are told in solid installments rather than little pieces, but all of your scenes click together so seamlessly that I'm still really enjoying it. It makes the story read very smoothly rather than breaking it up.

A fundamentalist religious group is a really interesting and really effective...setting, I suppose?...for an Edgar-AU. It fits really well for his character and is also a subject that tends to stir up a lot of emotions in people, so good on you for tackling it. I'll be totally honest and say that while reading this I had no problem with Jimmy dealing drugs and being a pervert, but the way Edgar's family acted at points made me wince (in a good, this-is-giving-me-feels kind of way). Maybe that says more about me that your writing, I'm not sure. BUT I'm hooked on this story just because I want to see how things unfold with that, especially once (I hope!?) Edgar and Jimmy start interacting more.

Character is great, you're fitting in lots of helpful details really efficiently. Like when Edgar's mom mentions "you should know that your brother doesn't ask for help," or his sister says that he "gets what he needs the hard way." Things like that are great tiny lines that say a lot about character. Loved the scene at the beginning, too, where Jimmy's trying to leave and Edgar doesn't say anything at all but there's still a lot of interaction between them through his uncomfortableness. IDK, your style is just really efficient in terms of the words used:information conveyed ratio (i.e. what we should all aspire to as writers) and I'm really enjoying it.

Can't wait to see what's going to happen at the rally! I hope poor Edgar doesn't get embarrassed too badly.